The Guitarist

Hi’ I’m the guitarist
slave to myself but also a master
Craniums Conjure powerful
and majestic thoughts
Laying out the blueprint,
for a soul revolution
Revolt cause contusions of
the drums dancing in your ear
Piercing loud goes the rift,
winds howl a storm is near
Thunder Intellect and grace (right in your face)
Amongst a different Pedestal
An entirely different race
Start to finishes I quench thirst
It’s a bit of a blood lust
The streets are Grimy and disgusting
Yet I miss nickel and dime’n
Dining on the freedom
Until Kazaam the magic I worked
Was put against me
My Stratocaster made an enemy

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A deathly beast named fame
Impossible to control
Crowds of thousand surround my skill
Force it to fold, Capture and rape it
Until it fits perfectly on their shelves
that’s called a recorded album
I am surrounded by thieves
Paparazzi calls my posse
None of them sat on the same street corners
Saw the horrors I wrote about
Sung the songs, or felt the tips of my fingers
After hours and hours of using my loved one
Wearing on her nerves, breaking her strings
For a hope of the very beast I’d now give back for freedom

FREEDOM

I wish I could have know its meaning

Willing now to revoke my pleasure
Against the starlight’s ( In love with the pale moon)
Never more is the stringed beauty to be the same
The Crowds have Disturbed it as it has I


Forever more doomed
Resilience matters not in hell
Eternities Bind hold my Sound
Every time that I am crowned I
Deny the withered throne
Only a madman would oblige
My soul means more to me

I Vomit at your demands
I Have Freedom

Death is an Option
Now I am One with the rifts


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I liked this piece as it is more of a character piece, which I enjoy to read. The imagery was very strong in this piece as well as the emotion. The wording of it all see a bit chaotic and some parts just a bit hard to understand. The WANTFREEDOM lines are alright. Some of them work very well other just seem awkwardly worded. The story told of a disillusioned guitarist is clear by the end of the piece. I enjoyed it so good stuff.

this as a pretty cool piece, really nice imagery/creativity. i thought it was a really cool read, the flow was good and the overall aspect was pretty clear. nice drop man. this could be worthy of a HoF probably.

i thought this was dope man very original never seen a peice like this man so i give you prop's writing something so intense as this in a music artform kind of way the metaphor's were great in this, nice imagery - a whole lot of it also, the emotion was meh on point for this style of written any way duke love the pictures also man they fit right in all in all the vocabulary,format,pic's,imagery and all meshed well........NOM'S

damn, this right here had many truths about a musician and i like the play on the guitarist life..summed it up pretty well..imagery; i could see every image in my head while i was reading it and you worded the substance well imo..keep at it extreme this one im def feeling.

wow......your pieces are always fresh and original man.
this piece was real funky and fresh and I dreamed up this gothy character in my head......that sees his destiny as being a good guitarist....dope.

My favorite part is the I want freedom part and this part also:


Force it to fold, Capture and rape it
Until it fits perfectly on their shelves
that’s called a recorded album
I am surrounded by thieves
Paparazzi calls my posse
None of them sat on the same street corners
Saw the horrors I wrote about

its like i was reading kurts private diary...tight.
9/10.

thanks for all the feed and thanks forthe mon ka and upp for more hopefully

man up