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Please stop this! Is what you scream when I drop this.
Leave you topless then toss you in the lochness.
Or you can call me a monster after I stomp ya.
In the flesh and redesign your whole mesh contour.
Got poison flowing straight through my veins.
About to kill those boys in the next room, waiting on James.
Even though it feels like the rap king came, its impacting my brain.
With all of these other rappers acting the same.
Who's it up to, to get back in the game?
The same guys you see drunk attacking a dame.
The day i stop treating you like a piece of meat- is non existent.
Just waiting for a beast to speak- upon this written.
Still that’s a fact that I kill pack rats.
Coming down like a battle axe to cattle with the Acc of sat nav
Now I’m so close, to leaving you comatose.
With rhymes to your ears like a bold aroma to nose.
A soldier that grows colder with each boulder he throws.
That knows how bad this iron will solder your hoes and alter your flows

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The flow and delivery on this piece was nice...keep up the work man

you definately had flow in this which was nice and smooth yes ill give you that man, but honestly dude the rhymes scheme was ok in some parts at best but overall in all area's it was to simple, the vocab meh i dont know, i'd say your moving in the right direction but at the same time you need to elevate immensly. keep at it though man you got potential.

had some decent multis and metas, but some not so good metas. try using more complec metaphors, and try to create an idea inside of ur lines, dont jus throw together words that rhyme. not a bad read at all. keep elevating fam