"Envy of a Shadow"

"Envy of a Shadow"

(Beat plays)

Yo....
I'll murder you verbally, you'll be spared into surgery
nervously...circling Jojot like inferior mercury
I....astound your eyeballs like watching Atlantis surface see
confuse you to a point you'll be readin' my verses vertically
So...I take a moment to focus on Al (Capone)nts
whos holdin' out submachine guns to fully uphold opponents
And....he is a hero to some crazy minded evil people
as well as a leader screaming at the sight of pointy needles
The...shadow created by his shoulders and his body placement
bodies breakin' physically and mentally makes jealous hatred
Jojot is different I'm sufficiant in inflictin' lyrics
deep inside the souls of people, reap around their restin' spirits
My clear saliva changes composition when I'm spittin'
turning to acidic liquid burning through the compitition
Emcees will envy me like gangstas envy Al Capone
they live within the borders of our shadows, consider it home

(Beat Plays)

This...theory continues as delirious nonsense
to jealous individuals who tear up their conscience
I...destroy the envy in people to make their minds stable
by rappin' out morals like a kind and gentle Aesop Fable
Like broken cable, some dudes can lose their image quick
by changing face expressions everytime confused emotions switch
from superstars to famous athletes on the TV screen...
...to former enemies who grow up to be better beings
this fuels the jealousy inside your brains capacity
your self respect depletes and all your morals turn to ash you see
you start to lose your pride and wander in a blank disguise
to hide your body figure leaving holes to fit your weary eyes
So I imply, take a realization in your values...
...and notice your unique in every dream that you allow through
Now focus on escapin' the shadows of famous people...
...don't envy their success, It'll burden your heads cerebral
So take a moment....envy is hate so don't reborn it...
...relieve your thoughts and find a place where you relax and hone it

Peace.................

(Beat goes...Song ends)

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bump...

i think you should focus more on imagery when you write mann it lacked that alot but vocab was intense throughout rhyme scheme could use some work, emotion wasn't that strong of a point either for this drop but you did ur thing with flow wish u would of posted what beat you were listening to so i could get a better vibe with what you were pushing across just try to focus more on the title and stop worrying about how big the words are u use within your rhyme scheme


RTF oon
above November Clouds
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thanks man and yeah this rap was suppose to be an audio but then i lost the beat so....also I couldnt really focus on imagery and vocab since then it would be a little hard for the listener to understand and capture in his mind...

anyway thanks for the feed...

come on!!!