Krem's Final Drop

Do you remember, when we actually first met?
Our friends sat us at a table, then they left
we just looked at each other, with no clue what to say
I was just like "hello", and your were like "hey"
and just from that, we lasted like 2 years
had some rough times, but weren't that severe
at first i never talked much, but then i told you why
it was about my past, that's why i was so shy
your the only person that i ever told that too
but that's just cause i knew i could trust you

But after those years, we had our final break up
fightin with each other, i couldn't keep my mouth shut
i said so many things, i knew that i never did mean
like how i "hate you", i'm just an enraged teen
and i guess your right, i'm not the same person no more
i don't really know who i am, i just don't kno anymore
you probly think this is all bullshit, fuck i would too
If i was you, and i was seeing from your point of view
I caused you so much shit, so now i'm gonna stop
cause this is my final line, this is my final drop

It's been fun y'all, thanks for makin me feel welcome in here.
but i'm done with poetry, well for now anyway, i could
get back into it, who know's. Just the way i'm feelin now.
Have a good one.

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Encore......Encore.....Encore....my boy Krem Amazing i really liked this piece it came straight from the heart man Deep written emotional depthness in this piece and yea i could relate But dont quit on Poetry man dont i am telling you. Pretty creative piece there was imagery on this piece i liked it.

tight poem, there was imagery in this n there was ALOT of emotion here. imagery was there and it was good

......fav part.......

and i guess your right, i'm not the same person no more
i don't really know who i am, i just don't kno anymore
you probly think this is all bullshit, fuck i would too
If i was you, and i was seeing from your point of view
I caused you so much shit, so now i'm gonna stop
cause this is my final line, this is my final drop

dont stop wit poetry, yah have AOLT of talent and so many people enjoy reading what you have to sya cuz it has real emotion and it always comes though with a clear message....

keep droppin
return tha fava

....bless

Nice drop Krem. It was fluid and had a great flow to the read. I could see the next line and how it would tie into the last. Good job and I hope you find your way back into poetry one day. Good luck dawg.

Bounce

thank's for the replies y'all

dam krem that drop was hot ...
nice vocab...
good rhyme's...
nice delivery...
hot secquence...
overalll mad dope mad propz to krem good stuff

dogg..u need to stay in poetry, this is ur thing
...mad nice piece..touched my heart

damn kid..i didnt even get to read more of ur poems before u left...its a shame u decided to stop...but its beautiful that u stopped with such a nice drop....vocab, flow all on point...krem...nice exit....return to us soon...respect...-shi-

Thanks for the replies, means alot
have a good one

Krem 4 Life
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Aight Krem...

This is the first poem I've read from you...yo me the imagry and emotion was excellant...especially in the first part...cause I've done that before..so i jus imagined myself in that position...Vocab was good...multis could be upped...but weren't neccesary in this piece...nice drop man

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