Put it Down by Baby-Smilez and Big Boozy

Baby-Smilez

Tipys like this, drop it like this....
cause this is how i put it down.....
i fuck men not hoes....im make money..
with so many jokes..if im gon be beat then...
let me get beat by you.... im gon finish it
and then let u finish me.... so put it down..
and the hood is all i need..


Big Boozy

put it down on da low key i got more handles den de Professor come n please somebody call me Mr. Keyz i need a spare homegirl gone put it down after she gets my fantasy......................................... let it be clear u mess sdis chick u bound 2 get slapped we'll leave ya body woreser den B.T.K did his victims

some feedbck would be nice....

Rather simplistic piece.... needs complexity vocab and baby,, need a little longer lines.. Boozy, Structure needs work.. complexit, vocab... All the same things..

Ok Piece

alright

Baby-Smilez

Tipys like this, drop it like this....
cause this is how i put it down.....
i fuck men not hoes....im make money..
with so many jokes..if im gon be beat then...
let me get beat by you.... im gon finish it
and then let u finish me.... so put it down..
and the hood is all i need..

^^^This verse really says nothing and barely rhymes at times when its only 7 lines long


Big Boozy

put it down on da low key i got more handles den de Professor come n please
^^^more handles then the professor??????what???then why follow with come n please????

somebody call me Mr. Keyz i need a spare homegirl gone put it down after
she gets my fantasy..........
^^^alright Mr. Keys why do you wanna be called that

let it be clear u mess sdis chick u bound 2 get slapped we'll leave ya body woreser den B.T.K did his victims
^^^only clear line and its played....

no disrespect to u 2 but this needs alot work....first work on what kid before me said and then work on writing longer verses so that its shows more of your abilities then the few each of you threw out.

yeah better structure rhymes, sorta hard to understand and get I had to read it a couple times to comprehend what you were saying, way to damn short and with all the pauses seems like the whole things a chorus to something.

go home and cuddle wit your hoes

You need to put in 2 links to 2 pieces you've replied to with decent feedback. You need 16 lines minimum and the drop has to be at a decent standard.

Closed, read the rules next time.