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Life as a whole
Living life is a bad habit
As a child - u can't have it
As a teenager - life seems over dramatic
As and as ya get older - ya can't stand it
So why do we hate living
But we seem so scared of dieing
Why is life intresting
But yet we keep trifling
Why is life so wonderful
But yet its so destroyed
Why is life so destructable
But yet it is enjoyed
Why do we feel hatred
But always want love
Why is life so sacred
But yet we never hate enough
Living life is like a present
Its always surprised, but prices never mentioned
But no matter what life is like a refreshment
Because with the bad and good, our lives are pleasent
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tight shit fam its amazing somone at your age made this thats awesome cuz ...... i loved the imagery and the figurative language ........ the only thing you shouldv'e done diffrently is the title you shouldv'e made it just life or somthing else besides that
but other than that it was good
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a little choppy but good overall.
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this was tight overall, short but good, feelin tha wordplay and flow....they both were very good in this piece, the message wasnt vague...though it was too simple, you got to the point too easily, i feel if you would've put more time into this message it woulda came out even better, other than that nothing was wrong with this one ima give it a 7
continue writin....
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Ok Poem. Not great but ok. The wordpaly could have been better and same with structre. The flow was aiight. Creativty needs elevation and Imagenary was ok. Remember theres room in every one for elevation.. 5-10
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=305099
RTF.
