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The Takeover
Truthfully, each day of my life is a nightmare
Used to fear the future but now we're right there
Too many groups who refuse to fight fair
Never considering the consequences it might bare
The sci Fi dystopia is a destructive disruption
Of the ordinary, as we descend into dysfunction
Democracy dies as the dissent devours discussion
Distractors devising division acting like this doesn't
Deviate from decent days, as pawns struggle
Launch subtle change like boiling a frog's bubble
It's inconspicuous until it dawns trouble
The demonic monsters are demonstrable
Disciples redefine, poised in misdirection
See, they're hiding in plain sight avoiding detection
Believe all woman despite the voice of deception
Feminism rages with unsightly deities
Seven middle aged sisters like the Pleiades
It's out of this world how logic is this distant
Undecided if it's dimwitted or vindictive
Truth is now what the youth expounds as syndicated
Heroes villainized and never vindicated
Dictating veneration via victim status
A straight male is a vile sickly savage
we're the ones outside picking cabbage
Butt you whine about dick advantage
Expecting equal outcome is pussy privilege
Men rule the world because we push the limits
You talk psychology but the toxicology
Reports retorts your knowledge of biology
You resort to fallacy, no matter where i turn it follows me
Protect the truth and free speech, that's my policy
I swear, I bare a Voltairesque disposition
When feelings conquer facts it's their next Inquisition
Capitalism was catapulted into this condition
Capital corruption causes corrosion and constriction
Restrictions, prohibitions, Communist dogma
Road to the riches replaced by bologna
I mean phony baloney bullshit about community
Robin Hood government robbing goods from you and me
Can't properly prosper but continue voting foolishly
Expecting different results now that's solely lunacy
What can the godly figures Sol and Luna see?
Birth of destruction or the earth spiraling beautifully?
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That was pretty cool. Like a hybrid of Cry and Enoch. There were a couple lines after the midway mark where the flow seemed to slip a bit but the first half was definitely entertaining. Glad to see you still writing, make sure to hit up chronicles of the Wanderer. First part of a series Cry and I are doing. Nominated.
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This was amazing and insightful... I could relate because as a woman I've been thru the "fields" like a man... but I'm not a feminist and many of my exes or friends have been offended by my strength or really just being straight up and speaking it as it is. I don't believe in being submissive either BUT at the same time a man should protect, guide, and teach. You brought up a lot of feelings for me reading this and I hope to see more. Thank you!
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Heyyyyy man! It’s Cry! Long time no speak. Haven’t talked in forever, hope you still trying your audio thing and honing those skills my dude. I miss our chats sometimes but hate social media much more lol. So it’s still worth not speaking unfortunately!!!
Your piece here was dope bro. There was one odd word usages here for me if I’m being reeeeally nitpicky. Just the “demonstrable” part. I felt like it threw the scheme off a little or you had to pronounce the word different to make it match. Also bologna doesn’t rhyme with dogma and is actually said the same way you say “baloney” haha… but that’s being so picky it’s retarded honestly. You really did well and I like your language. You’ve always been good with your vocabulary and you never seem to run out of words my man. The idea of useless activity during the collapse of a beautiful world in the middle of total chaos is cool. I like a good ol’ doom and gloom style piece and there’s not much bad I can say. I know you can get more creative than this - but it was refreshing as hell to read something from you and see you make your Rapbattles return! I like that some of us are slowly gravitating back to the site and always enjoy a familiar face. I’m on here like every day. You should get more active man!! Be cool to talk again. There’s an RB discord chat to join as well you should download the app and come chop it up sometime. Much love!
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its so dope to see a drop from you man. You are really one of the first people i made contact with joining this site and have remained cool with from day 1. So i almost feels a bit nostalgic for me when i see a rare trajik drop pop on the forum and it feels like the clock went back what is it? 10 fucking years now lmao. . .
anyway, i really liked all the alliteration splashed in every where especially in the first half. usually someone gone for so long then coming back will have a lot of technical errors and rust, but im not seeing that here. I would really have to nit-pick to find any sort of flaws in this. The flow was really smooth, your concept was cool, everything was fluid and easy to read. man, i would love to see the likes of you, 143, emily, grimmy, YD, and slayrr make return to this site. or at the very least, i would love a reunion collab hahaha. . anyway man. this was dope, im just happy man. . glad to see you around even if just temporary, glad your doing well, glad that your pen is still sharp. stay up fam
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Good read... me and them just don’t get along... we don’t have the same tastes or humor. But back to the piece I liked it and how I relate? I really don’t know... I just hope it’s like when the stock market crashed and I went up. I really don’t know what to say except EVERYONE deserves comfort and peace in their own body and not to be abused or forced.
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I bought stock because there was no way to go but up and made a minor killing when it did