Anne Frank; A Sermon

[Lord Sarcasm]

-Murder on one man's vision-
-Bias of her religion-
-A silenced heartbeat-
-Forsaken; and acting discreet-
-A crimson tide-
-Encrust on the viewers eye-
-For her tales entail-
-A taste of bread that's stale-
-Right below the bible-
-It may show that God is lible-
-But to blame what's innocent-
-Is the same as ignorance-
-Because a force beyond his power-
-Are the reasons behind her life-
-forcing her pain & strife-
-And if forgivance is allowed-
-In her afterlife she can stand strong and proud-
-And lifelong ties may be severed-
-But in this new place; they stand alone together-

[Lord Sarcasm]

Mrs Shumann..I did write this..and this is my proof!...to everyone on rb..don't ask

[Penskills]

[CENTER]-Murder on one man's vision-
-Bias of her religion-
[CENTER]

^Great Opener...

I actually found this a very good piece...it is a bit surprsing to see people on here are sleeping on this...you took a good topic and turned it to a great piece...your imagery was very good..as times goes by..I'm more and more impressed with your work..Dopey~~~~{we have no crew Forum }

[Reeco]

yea this was a very good piece, it flowed really well as the simple nature to the text. vocab you used was also good. ya showed also quite a good deal of emotion on this piece which was reflected in the words. i've read a lot of ya stuff in the past and your gettin a lot better with age :-) keep this up man. pz

can ya leave your opinion on poetic torment, link is under my sig. thanks!!

[FanTa ZeE]

i went on holiday a while ago and we visited the annex, it was okay, but the story is a real upseting one, looking around there you had to appriciate how Anne and her family had to live. It was cruel but i liked this piece, it shows skill, you had the emotions right there.

[Ron B. Vicious]

hey this was dope like Penskills said perfect opener, good shit sounded professionally done. (not saying u aint a pro i'm saying as far as degree n poetry type shit)

[Lord Sarcasm]

^^lol i'm not..my first poem

[Reeco]

^^ return the favour!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[Marek]

this was the best one i've read so far to be honest with you dude, you had the emotion really deep felt,
in this poem..like homegirl said a couple post up..
it is sad how they had to grow up, cause i read the whole diary on this,
but yeah..its nice to see someone writing a poem about them, seriously..props

return the favor on my peice called CRUEL!!

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