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    Why

    Verse 1
    Ever since I was a baby boy I thought ud always be my friend/
    But now our time together on this world has come to a sudden end/
    I send u my prairs daily, but never get them in return/
    Sittin here plottin the death of the fuckers that let u burn/
    To the lord I turn, asking why, whyd u have to leave/
    Ill never understand, the answers ill never perceive/
    As I achieve my goals one by one I’m wishing u could see this/
    But ever since u left, it seems as if my hearts entered an abyss/
    One it will never exit, one it will never leave behind/
    I try to confine my anger, try to unwind/
    but I just don’t see how I could be so fuckin blind/
    How could I not see it, how could I not tell/
    I never got to say goodbye, never got to say farewell/
    Verse 2
    Everyday I think of how I could’ve stopped it/
    But by doing nothing the title of death …. uve adopt it/
    Im sorry I didn’t do everything in my power/
    And as a consequence I just sit here and cower/
    Our time together was great, I couldn’t ask for anything better/
    But I never thought id be sittin here writin u this letter/
    That ull never see, never read, never now existed/
    Damn this shit is twisted, damn this shit is hard/
    Ever since u left ive been physically, mentally, and emotionally scarred/
    With no regard for anything, and revenge on my mind/
    Ill will find my answers, my determination is undefined/
    Do I need to remind the bitches that did this, ima send um straight to hell/
    Im gonna rebel they aint going in no prison cell, they going six feet under/
    So be ready for my thunder, here I come/

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    Last edited by flavin; August 3rd, 2005 at 08:24 PM

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    uppin for feedback

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    it was alright liked the first verse better couldve worked on a better subject or had some more multis but overall it was a decent piece the only things i would work on would be some better multis but besides that decent drop
    7/10
    Distinct - Peace

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    Hey Man, I Liked That. That Was A Tight Ass Spit.

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    uppin

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    that was sick man keep that shit up

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    was a gud piece... was nice n got ya point across.. wasnt boring like others n tha vobac was gud! keep it up i like it *winks*

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    can i get some goddamn feed

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    plz gimme some fuckin feed ill rtf

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    you need to elevate...your structure was fucked up which fucked up your rhyme scheme..you need more complexity and better wordplay..elevate.~1~


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    uppin....a weak later

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    damn this was nice homie....straight ill nice vocab and shit.
    i was mos def. feelin this

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