Rb? You Want Me To Lie To Recieve Feed?

[Trema]

Rb! who can harm me, with cowards lieing about their childhood
-whats good? did yo daddy really die, and do u come from the hood?
your status reads your a vet, your rhymes covered up by deception
-my elevation is dedicated to you, all of you are in my view...
you cant sue me, this aint real-pretend you done shit
-type it up, make it up, an most of you leave feed like a bitch
ok, i was abused my mummas sectioned-coz she thought she was pikachu
-my big issue with my dad, is that he use to make brthday cards outta tissue
i miss u mumma *tears start to roll down my face*
-its a disgrace how muthafuckas can lie about the taste
the place
there race
there pace
and case
all theses motherfucking things, is like rb is a fucking rat race
now u say you live life hard in society, your mouths been vacant
-if your typeing on your keys,it means your money's engraved kuz'
your pc, your trainers, your phone and yo drugs
-on the web u choose who u r,but in d real wurld u aint a thug
metaphors come slowly, like a turtle in the army
-similies slide together, but your feed just arms me
try me, you want me to lie to recieve feed homie
-thats like eating a sandwich wid 2 week old belony
i'm cold b, you dont know me, nor do you ow me
-you dont own me-so i suggest you keep your mouth closed b
seems like fronting is the best factor in your eyes i see it
-believe it, i stand tall like raiden-never will i ever loose it
mother fucker prove it!

SO SO much shit on my mind, too fucking long to write in 1 piece, 1up

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[`Ink]

You already do lie out your ass.

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You come off like your dope.

[Trema]

You already do lie out your ass.

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You come off like your dope.

lol at ink, thanks for the feed chump, why you say i come off like um dope i've never said that-i take feed like a soldier every bit and i use it to elevate. if chumps like you cant see that then, fuck you! piece

[jake]

It was aight...i werent really feelin tha flow much but the concept and vocab were str8...keep writin son...1

[Mic D]

wow.... this was boring........... there are no quotables at all... seemed kinda like pointless rambling.... try using some type of metas/wordplay that are raw/vivid to show emotion...'turtle' and 'slow' ....boring.....Vivid Metas/Wordplay enhances emotion..... This lacks any emotion at all....thats why it gets boring... u see some amount of skill almost there....but its boring as hell