Misery

[UnknownAgenda]

Its hell living a lie, waiting to die, sitting at home starting to cry
Tell me why, oh why is this misery killing me so why wont my soul let go
Jesus give me wings, I want to leave the winters and enter the springs
Church members lie to gain money and fame, this life's going down hill
Drug dealers in cuffs counting that last bill, murders taking that last kill
In a world of kill or be killed, they chose to the first of the two
Now they're stuck in a picture that our goverment drew
Another day and another life gone, tell me misery how long must I wait
Untill I see my dying fate, why is it that evil holds this much wieght
Darkness brings me protection in a world rejection where everything's hate
Life's only curved by corrupted leaders, no one's wishing to go straight
Starting to think I never should of took that first glance out the womb
Now 21 and only finding chaos and doom, only relief is a dead mans tomb
Only finding another battle to make me stronger, so I wonder when's the test
I think I've solve my answer to misery, life only challenges its best/

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=249229
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=248810

[Ïçê ~Ð~]

Look dawg, it's pretty nice
I wont lie, your structure is way off, your flow is somewhat original
It rhymes but not always and then boom two rhymes in one line, it's kinda unique, I like that
your overall level of this verse was ok, I mean it had nothing really outstanding to be worth mentioning
Peace, and good luck to ya

[Play-Boy187G]

The drop was nice...as said above the structure has problems...but the vocab and concept were good...your rhymes are good, but when it comes to reads you have got to have good structure or shit is gonna sound horrible.
-Play-Boy

[jake]

aight....To start with..-Sort Out That Structure-!!...that is the 1st Bad thing bout it...
The next bad thing is originality...this is quite a common subject believe it or not, but ive read a few like this one...Now the good point...Even tho concept is common, pulled it off well....I also felt the vcab you used, was nice...
overall- 6/10...1