so sorry for your loss, our cheapest sympathies....

[soberSEOULja]

Please, you can't force feed me your deepest sympathies,
i can't believe the bullshit, seein you simply pleased
i see the lies in your eyes despite that you sympathize,
saying simple lies, to hide the tears that ill cry
from the demise of the one i called fatherrr
i'm so weak and grieven, but to them its a bother
one week and i'm forgiving, those who took his memory to slaughter
this pairing of fake caring and disparing, leaves me shootin to kill,
for those minute minded men who live just for the thrill
like the minute-men to the woman, theyre just a simple tease,
like your words to my face, fuck your cheapest sympathies




eh basically just describing how fake people seem to act to me after my father passed away recently.....







http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...11#post3926011
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...93#post3925993

[blessedtongue]

I was feelin this piece I know what it's like when u loose somebody close to you & all these motherfuckers keep tellig u they know how u feel & shyt...good piece but it could have had a little more imagery...I don't know if you was just venting or this was really a piece u sat down & wrote but u on da right track just work on pulling ya emotions out more in ya pieces

[Mariposa Latina]

i went thru a similar thing so i kno what u bout...^^^i agree dat ur imagery coulda been better but then again, it depends what u goin 4
u could tell it came from somewhere deep it just reads like u didn't get it all out--maybe ur venting?
Anywayz, overall tyt drp
Keep postin & return the feed plz, i'm new to RB & am def open 2 help...Gracias!

"Letter From A Ryder"
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=270190

[soberSEOULja]

guess it was a mixture of venting and boredem....but yeh, thanks for the feed guys, i'll spend more time on my next one, i guess mostly i was just working on my wordplay on this one and venting....but keep feeding =)....o yeh....ill hit ur piece up in a bit mariposa

[soberSEOULja]

pop that pop that pop that