Addiction

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Addiction



I sit and stare at the wall,while I fall out in to this zone
thinkin my brain is fried,cuz I always think that I'm alone
sweatin the drugs out of my body,when there is no more around
I start shaking like I was cold,cuz my high is coming down
start looking for more drugs,like I was hungry for some food
even if I have to rob and steal,cuz I start getting in a bad mood
I feel that I need it in my system,just to let the day go by
cuz when I feel that high,it just makes the time fly
but I ask why,is the devil in my system
I know if I die,people will say we don't even miss him
so I just take another puff,and let the smoke go into my lungs
cuz I rather die doing drugs,insted of being shot or hung
won't even have to feel the pain,cuz my brain will go numb
but I think I need to stop,cuz it starting to make me feel dumb
I know its a bad habit,but I always through alot of depression
but I won't even stop,until my brain actually gets the message
so I guess I will keep doing it everyday,until I learn my lesson
Or get me some mental help,so I can tell them my confessions
so until the day that I die,I'm always gonna be on a mission
I'm always gonna be a trouble maker,until I can fight all my addictions

links

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...html?p=5841912
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...html?p=5841925

[NaS]

This shit was dope cause I understood exactly what you was talkin about, I just think most of the first half wasn't worded as good as it could of been, but it's great cause the message was clear. The ending was my favorite part cause the rhyme scheme ended up on point.

Was it based on a true story? If it wasn't, this piece is even more amazing. When I say amazing, don't take it to the head, I just mean you executed it well, but I still think theres room to improve your vocab

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thanks

[WillKill4Money]

mos def was a tight verse jus leave me to wonder...
where you referring to CRACK or WEED?
it seemed morelike crack would fit but than again i guess so could weed...i jus think for weed to be considered a drug to think this deeply about is weird...maybe im jus not addicted...

good verse anyway thou everything else was "on point like a harpoon"....

RFT PLZhttp://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...am-343320.html

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thanks will get to the link when I sober up from my drunkness lmao

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[Ntalek]

This was mediocore @ it's best.... I mean the wording was coo..and all but the topic is a bit played and so was your take on it..The strongest thing in this drop was the emotion..and that's what basically carried this.as your vocab was simple..and easy to comprehend..You really didn't have enough internals to make this flow as smooth as it should've..but it was still a good drop though nothing special..You gotta get cha edge back Va. it's like you lost the feeling..or something..keep writing...



RTF pls..
1. Heart 1. Beating

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I didn't lose my touch I just been working on alot of audio lately

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