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    Gray's Anatomy


    Gray's Anatomy




    Oh Brother another color...



    With the different shades; we collect thoughts on a different page
    Because now is when I celebrate the special day, of increasing age
    I search for sickness, as I seek the plague just to defeat the mage
    Casting a blizzard, on the mere wizards unlocking a secret stage
    Famous comedians would be afraid to perform on, as we swarm on
    The honey lights shining, as it heats the cold heart into a warm one
    Opening the soda, watching it fizz to the top of the lyrical quota
    Another year another day I'm getting older, the end is getting closer
    But the shades of Gray, show me the way in as well as the escape plan
    As we shake hands, though my mother always told me I'd be a great man
    Falling head first, in Red dirt on the Indian clay the feeling is complicated
    Though I'm not as anxious, the color Green only made me feel intoxicated
    With every option taken, I took the wrong road of a pagan fellowship
    But the road that paved the way was nothing close to Yellow bricked
    Singing the Blues, with a Black male that couldn't bribe me for my ID
    In living color, my imagination painted images, that became lively exciting
    As I fade slow, with my brave soul and my face low to the surface
    The velvet maroon drapes fall lower, as its cased closed and curtains
    I'm almost certain colors is what makes my world a great thing to see
    As the humid color of teal, is as real as a human; which I am proud to be
    Splashes of Orange lashing out at me, with a sharp taste it left
    Because the Purple grapes made the taste less depressed




    My colors blend
    And set another trend


    Clinching the best shades
    Although some of them just fade


    We make the best of the time we see bright
    But the only color we can't see, may be white




    On to the Gold, oh the gold is so soft and mellow
    It only reminds me of a darker but sharper yellow
    False with fellows, Magenta flowers lost their petals
    Which made the color Lavender, look all but special
    Though it makes the poetry stand only to keep me
    From looking at White, and allowing to see it so cleanly
    A genius of the Brown sands, as we found lands
    And Silver mad the sound stand, as a profound man
    With a nice Maroon, had one chance to feel the crown
    Aqua Blue I got from you, only made my feelings drown



    It all seems silly now, because I think Gray misses me
    But I didnt regret that she left me, until the day she kissed me




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    Re: Gray's Anatomy

    nice works, i diddnt gel with a word on 3rd line though, mage???

    nrway i the flow seemed ti take of more as the lines went on, so i was liking the build-up and then getting stuck into the topic......

    Opening the soda, watching it fizz to the top of the lyrical quota
    Another year another day I'm getting older, the end is getting closer

    was illy, flowed like a scarface bar. and was deft reasoning,,,,


    With every option taken, I took the wrong road of a pagan fellowship
    But the road that paved the way was nothing close to Yellow bricked

    yeah.......dope fe#sho. u locked it down here, this was mad smooth###



    Singing the Blues, with a Black male that couldn't bribe me for my ID
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    lolz, that;s official lyricists type shit,,hot line


    uea was illy yo. the whole colours thing was just working for you, and the belly of the verse had good character, and was lyricaly nice, bars was sharp and effective, and just flowing so it could be rapped easily,

    yea nice styles and concepts yo coming with, the imagery was of da weezy on this joint......... coo set up of format as well, gave it a touch of srt right there, , no lie was a mad tight piece, ..


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    Re: Gray's Anatomy

    Thanks alot man...lol appreciate that shit for real
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    Re: Gray's Anatomy

    very dope piece man.

    loving the imagery all across the board. The introduction of each color was connected with some great transitions that allowed everything to appear smooth. dope. diction was well-placed and it enhanced the poetic vibe that I got from your piece. The rhyme scheme was sick, mixed in with some cool multies and inner rhymes that kept everything on the move. Haven't read a piece from you in awhile I don't think, but was very glad to have read this, I've seen so many Gray's Anatomy title pieces I wasn't going to hit it but im glad I did cuz it stands above the rest. keep it up.

    hit up my piece with some feed if u see it. thanks.

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    Re: Gray's Anatomy

    I dig the way you express in a dense yet comprehensible manner. It's abstract while being both relatable and NOT suffocant. First stanza found you kind of wading into the topic a little bit, especially with regard to the emphasis (assumed, lol) on the scheming. Then with the final stanza, a more concrete path and relativity was asserted.

    Overall...this was a very polished, well thought out piece..props man
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