I Love..) You

[HighEngineChief]

I Love..) You
By HighEngineChief

Love

Pain and sorrow accompanied
All the nerves that electrify it

Swindling my heart for it's every desire

--- Take it!

Tear away the layers

....Open me up

Bleed me dry in any figure of speech
Drown me in the cool pastel current...
- Sapphire blue dripping,

From your eyes



The vibe without you around it's arm
Is cantankerous,

Stale air, (empty colors if not sapphire)
Devilish charmer, my sweet blue requisite

-- I'm still open -- !
Please return to sew this gaping flesh

It itches of infatuation
Flowing red fidelity

I'm laying here in naked truth

--- Flirting with the idea of
Kingdom Come

Just know no Elysium can equate
To (your beauty, and
I Love..) You

[HighEngineChief]

links coming

[LedgenZ]

I thought this piece was kind of weird, not in a bad way, just in a weird way. Odd, I guess you could say. And it's not so much the content, but more so, the distracting little smiles and the hyper blue-ish blurred text that sort of turned me off.

Eh, I don't know, I guess I'm one to talk, right? Anyway, I can appreciate the creativity of your structure, even if it's was, maybe, just maybe, a little too...animated...for my taste! But then again, don't be too surprised if you see me try a similar style down the line.

As for the actually writing, I'd say it was pretty decent, although leagues below what you normally produce. I mean, the beginning was dope. I loved everything about it. However, the middle was huh...how do I put this...sort of less than your best. Actually, it was boring to be honest. I think it picked back up towards the end for a minute, then kind plummeted back to the bottom like a bag of rocks in the ocean. Obviously, not a bad write, just not up to the standards I think I've grown accustom to seeing from you. Anyway, I don't doubt your ability and this piece doesn't make me think any less of you as a writer. Because like I said, it was a solid write by all accounts, just not up to par with that HEC caliber product we've all witnessed in past. But yeah. Stay cool. and...




pz

[HighEngineChief]

It was one of my old poems, so i said fuck it and through some stupid shit in there for the hell of it, lol guess it didn't work

Good look on the feed cuz

[LedgenZ]

Word. Not a problem. I still owe you feed to be fair. So be expecting much more in the future. Maybe not the near future, but not the distant either. Somwhere in betwen the now and later. Call it the neo-retro-future-ish feed. Nah, on second thought, don't call it that. Just expect more. Huh...yeah...it's bedtime! LOL. Pz