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    My attempt at poetry/rap

    I feel empty home and alone wondering if my sins will ever be atoned, i ask god for answers but i only hear him
    when im stoned, i guess im on gods list of the condoned. I'm sorry god it wasn't my intention to do wrong
    maybe i'll get to see you some day before to long if im ever welcome in the gates of heaven that is
    but right now hustlin is the only way i can suport my wife and kids. and im tired of being judged when
    you don't know half the life i live so how can you sit there and say how worthless of a guy i is. i
    was taught growin up that you have to thrive for shit so im doin that now tryin to survive this bitch.
    But go ahead guys keep on hating, as for me ill stand strong waitin for that break of light in this dark hole
    and when i find it i'll grasp it like a sharks hold.

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    Yeah Obamas right we do need change but can he stop a gun
    from hurtin someone from close range i dont know just ask the soldiers who died in war
    when half the time we don't know what fuck we even fightin for. Is it for war or is it for peace?
    i can't find peace knownin theres so many deceased, and crime rates at its highest yeah its increased
    lil kids dyin from gun shot wounds and disease.
    so please god please tell me why, why all these innocent people have to die were these people
    caught in the wrong place at the wrong time? were these people eyein the wrong face or caught in a wrong crime?
    fuck it lets rejoice and sing to this rhyme.


    hate or appreciate this shits pretty deep imo.

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    Re: My attempt at poetry/rap

    my rymes are so sick i have 2 tell em 2 behave
    yours are shit u probly got elvis turnin in his grave
    i know who u r a black man wanna be
    u cant be nuffink ur not a home boy like me
    cuz im worse than nwa
    cuz im around nd im here 2 stay
    cuz 2 me ur harmless
    try take me ull end up arm-less
    ill cut u like pieces of threads
    get chopped by me nd lose ya legs
    cuz im satan reincoranate
    so fight me nd ill demonstate
    im a legend sick are my rymes
    there so good they culd be crimes
    you say u famous but u only famous where u buy the dope
    imma design ya face wid a collidascope
    cuz your rymes are so dope
    ill give u a choice gun shot or hung wiv a rope
    cuz theres no way out
    cuz imma destroy u wiv ma killah clout
    cuz u cn mess wiv da gangstas gee
    when really u the 1 who gt the H.I.V
    cuz imma killu wiv the knife i bought frm u
    fuck ths shit ur rymes is thru

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