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    Greatness

    In this world I feel like there's no room for me
    With everybody it's the same fucking story
    Poor me my life's shit well when ya don't strive for greatness
    What the fuck do you expect to get
    Stop complaining about the life that you created
    Maybe that why you constantly getting faded
    You hate what you've become
    Well I'm Tryna write my next chapter
    When I look back on my past its all laughter
    Cuz the shit I've done really don't matter
    Today's a new start and something's changed in my heart
    Tired of the game I don't wanna be apart
    I'm dreaming but livin a nightmare
    I'm leaving this shit call me fake I don't care
    I'm letting go and moving on to something greater
    Saying goodbye to the game no cya later
    I'm headed for greatness and I know most of you will hate this
    Soon ya gonna hear me on every playlist
    I'm tired of this shit I'm gonna break the mold
    And make my life a story to be told
    I got that motivation like Rowland
    Driving through life like this motherfuckers stolen
    Suns setting and I'm rolling
    Dealt my hand I'm all in never folding
    I'm an all or nothing kinda dude
    I'm real you can tell by my attitude
    Just Tryna do what I can to succeed
    I got goals I'm Tryna to acheive
    But I got demons that like to deceive
    Drink that shit that leaves bruises on my arms
    Thought Id wake up from the nightmare but there's no alarms
    So I'm running like in being chased by the five o
    Where ill end up fuck I don't know
    But anythings better than this
    I'd start all over if I had one wish


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    Re: Greatness

    Lookin for some feedback

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    Re: Greatness

    Rhymes were really simple: mold/told, dude/attitude, heart/apart. I also couldn't really get the flow down but it might just not come through well through text. Keep writing man, try to use more multi word/syllable rhymes. Like instead of blue and shoe try something like ill choke you with my shoelace til you blue in the face (not the best example but you see where I'm coming from!)

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