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    Smile (First Topical Verse)

    December 14th, near 1-3am I quickly rushed my verse.
    My first one. And I keyed it late against The Real Spit late as fuck.
    I have modified it slightly. It's still pretty simple and stuff...
    Enjoy.
    woah wooooo
    I never even named this shit...uhhh I'll name it..

    The Real Wrath
    by Professor Frost

    http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...ost-Frost-Wins

    He was born in melody only to get lost in dissonance
    Torn between rifts of happiness & aggression; he couldn't distant it
    Kevin use to be a happy child, not the angry man he is now to be known
    They say mental deterioration starts at home where it is nurtured, bound & grown

    10 years ago...
    He arrived home from a day of school, he was only in 7th grade
    His mother was a deep crack addict, the burden of stress weighed,
    Down his image. He would rue the time of the bell as school was finished
    Time had just relinquished him to a sanctuary where comfort's cool diminished
    It was eerie, cold & desolate on his block
    The same feeling when alone in a small room without a clock
    He slipped up the steps, the sky was gray, it began to pour rain
    He looked to the door, why was it was open? His heart began to pour pain
    His heart was beating irregularly, out of place & time
    His small hand grasped the door's handle gingerly, hoping all was laced and fine
    But, he knew something was suspicious when in a small moment witnessed,
    He saw a pair of legs laying down behind the couch, his stomach succumbed to so much sickness
    He rushed to the back of the furniture & turned his mother's body over
    The foam was streaming out of her mouth slowly, he knew God had stole her
    The ambulance was called 20 minutes ago, still hadn't arrived
    He roared in anger, he was vindictive, certain she should still be alive
    The paramedics didn't arrive till an half of hour later
    With his tears streaming he said,
    "YOU BASTARDS TOOK YOUR TIME TO GET HERE, YOU COULD HAVE SAVED HER!"
    Instead he prayed for her back every day, but unfortunately she was dead

    10 years till present

    Kevin is now on DeathRow for 6 counts of 1st degree murder
    He'd tell his psychologist,
    "My mother compelled my actions...in my head I heard her."
    But to the rest of the world she didn't exist
    This was his vengeance on God & society, when pain & anger had to clash
    The wrath consumed his heart, the pace of hatred flowed in his blood and wavered too fast
    The 6 victims were crack dealers, in Kevin's eyes this was revenge to the exact
    But, why were the crack dealers dealing crack in the first place?
    The reality is wrath consumes us all, we take actions defying the law due to bitter tastes
    The world is a sinful place & life is full of tribulations which induce rage,
    That's for a fact

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    Re: (First Topical Verse)

    My only regret was sacrificing some of the flow to be so descriptive... -shrugs-

    Links:
    http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...rip-*New-Shit* Crazy crazy rhymes, very rapid. A unique read.
    http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...37-eyes-of-god This was the best work I had read recently. Got pretty high on my ratings system. Check it out.

    Recent Work:

    http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...Velvet-Fortune [Fan Favorite, as of lately]
    http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...e-Frost-s-Turn [For almost 15 minutes, iight]
    http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...-You-Need-quot [I am proud of this work]
    http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...8It-s-yours%29 [A good favorite]
    http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...arth-Aphrodite [It's okay, got me a win with it]

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    Re: (First Topical Verse)

    I'm so jealous ;o) LoL

    Seriously though, you are an impeccable writer with an immense array of talent, not only are you diverse, but you can come in a conquer any style as if it was your own. Keep going - I am not playing when I say that I am proud to even know you!

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    Re: (First Topical Verse)

    Quote Originally Posted by CLA919 View Post
    I'm so jealous ;o) LoL

    Seriously though, you are an impeccable writer with an immense array of talent, not only are you diverse, but you can come in a conquer any style as if it was your own. Keep going - I am not playing when I say that I am proud to even know you!
    Thanks Clam Chowder. I appreciate how you read my work, shows interest and care for my growth as a writer.

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