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    cactus spikes

    i take a walk, when i stop..my shadow advances two moves ahead..
    move and ya dead..my knife slice more crisis than isis..dont be losin ya head
    nobody will find it.be timeless in a world gone mindless "DID YOU HEAR WHAT I SAID?!?!
    stealthy soldier..creep up on you faster than ebola...you be like is death comin ova?
    yeah, but he's only stayin a minute..and i ain't waitin all day make your play or i end it.
    I use my weapon of choice..you guessed it my voice..blessed by my boy..hell yes it's moist
    help me open my mind like grenades to the face.lay em to waste..like trash takin naps at
    ya place..rockstar? ya stockcar's gettin lapped in this lyrical race..on my track ya get
    back or bitch-slapped in the face..give me a laptop and a usable signal..i'll take you
    you for a ride until we crash on my cymbals..beat you like a drumset. that's what you can
    come get..rhymes got you comin back like crackheads askin for another hit..think im the
    shit? i merely opened the gate, wait until you here my brother spit..ain't that right
    sir inge? kick down ya front door and fuckin bust the hinge..i guess im kinda like ya
    bitch the way i cuss yer friends..with those rhymes you'll never make it like a worm in the
    hot street..no sale.. you fail better luck at the swap meet..all i need is an M.I.C. and a
    hot beat..go ahead try and stop me..

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    Re: cactus spikes

    7 people viewed. 154 total views out of those 7 + guests of the site.

    And no one posted anything. Not even a "dope" or "work on your mechanics, pz".

    Battlecat, my advice for you to elevate as a writer is to keep coming with your wit tied in with your modernistic rhymes.
    References like "ISIS" give your verse a dimension of relevance & entertainment.
    Lines like this reserve my right to call you a dense writer:

    i take a walk, when i stop..my shadow advances two moves ahead..
    That's some smooth, refreshing shit right there. Keep those coming son.

    swag.

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    Re: cactus spikes

    MY ADVICE TO YOU WITH REGARDS TO YOUR WRITING IS THAT YOU HAVE MASTERED THE ASPECT OF WRITING IN STRAIGHT LINES SO NOW MAYBE YOU SHOULD HIT ENTER IN RANDOM PLACES WHENEVER YOU FEEL LIKE IT TO EXPERIMENT WITH YOUR STRUCTURE AND CENTRE YOUR VERSES TO LET PEOPLE KNOW YOU HAVE A KEEN AESTHETIC SENSE FOR MAKING YOUR SHIT ENTIRELY FUCKING UNBEARABLE

    THANKS, BATTLE CACTUS

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    Re: cactus spikes

    this isn't bad, keep at it.

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