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    Week 1: Ryno (0-0) vs. malediction (0-0) - RYNO WINS

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    Re: Week 1: Ryno (0-0) vs. malediction (0-0)

    Hey babe, here for 12. Will post tonight or tomorrow

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    Re: Week 1: Ryno (0-0) vs. malediction (0-0)

    12 is good
    aka Sorrow: the Broken Wing

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    Re: Week 1: Ryno (0-0) vs. malediction (0-0)

    Malediction aka Elegant Elephant

    I could never rock or hit a spot w/ u. So fkn suspect how could ur style compel us?
    If male clubs w/ the pole by his side, it’s cuz he’s got his dick swingin for a crowd of fellas.
    Them cartoonish antics’ll get u vanished. And trust me jack, I won’t care it hurts…
    Not only am I bringing Max Steel, I’m leaving ya face covered in it like that Psycho character.
    Let me embellish this cats doom. Frauds like u always flex like it’s mad cool,
    Homie the only time u’ve had heat in ur palms, is using the hand dryer before u exit the bathroom.
    His women? Fables. U tap out w/ chicks cuz u never leave w/ a “winner” label,
    Ur dates don’t just end w/ the cold shoulder. Bitches RKO u right through the dinner table.
    Everything u package is lame. But this Mac range clearin ya flaws, every ounce…
    W/O a doubt. Let’s see if Male man enough to deliver once I bring the dawgs out the house.
    Wux sent u to the wrong stop, screwed. Him killing Ry? It’s a long shot, true…
    I’ll skin dude. Then leave Elephant bones on display like that scene from Ong Bak 2.

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    Re: Week 1: Ryno (0-0) vs. malediction (0-0)

    1st off the name is Mal, the E is silent clown
    And I kick ish and bout to relieve your bowels
    My knife’ll part your flesh, dude my mark is death
    I’ll retort your body... till you fart your breath
    Fine bro I got your back, talking your spinal
    bars you spit are wack, the sites like Ry NO!!!
    You’re a son of a gun and i’m about cannons
    Separate spirit from body till you're out standing
    I know, i know, that’s a far reach, you bore ish
    I’m to the letter and you’re Stark par, a poor Knick
    You’re OK if it’s true things look better in slow-mo
    and i’ll light up your top like pizza hut in logos
    aka Sorrow: the Broken Wing

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    Re: Week 1: Ryno (0-0) vs. malediction (0-0)

    I could never rock or hit a spot w/ u. So fkn suspect how could ur style compel us?
    If male clubs w/ the pole by his side, it’s cuz he’s got his dick swingin for a crowd of fellas.
    pronunciation isnt male its mal
    Them cartoonish antics’ll get u vanished. And trust me jack, I won’t care it hurts…
    Not only am I bringing Max Steel, I’m leaving ya face covered in it like that Psycho character.
    is his alias max? if not it would work better if it was. ok bar here
    Let me embellish this cats doom. Frauds like u always flex like it’s mad cool,
    Homie the only time u’ve had heat in ur palms, is using the hand dryer before u exit the bathroom.
    light jab
    His women? Fables. U tap out w/ chicks cuz u never leave w/ a “winner” label,
    Ur dates don’t just end w/ the cold shoulder. Bitches RKO u right through the dinner table.
    ok cool
    Everything u package is lame. But this Mac range clearin ya flaws, every ounce…
    W/O a doubt. Let’s see if Male man enough to deliver once I bring the dawgs out the house.
    again with pronunciation
    Wux sent u to the wrong stop, screwed. Him killing Ry? It’s a long shot, true…
    I’ll skin dude. Then leave Elephant bones on display like that scene from Ong Bak 2.
    pretty cool

    vs

    1st off the name is Mal, the E is silent clown
    And I kick ish and bout to relieve your bowels
    nah
    My knife’ll part your flesh, dude my mark is death
    I’ll retort your body... till you fart your breath
    uhhh
    Fine bro I got your back, talking your spinal
    bars you spit are wack, the sites like Ry NO!!!
    strongest bar yet but not very hard hitting
    You’re a son of a gun and i’m about cannons
    Separate spirit from body till you're out standing
    coulda done more with this concept
    I know, i know, that’s a far reach, you bore ish
    I’m to the letter and you’re Stark par, a poor Knick
    dont get it
    You’re OK if it’s true things look better in slow-mo
    and i’ll light up your top like pizza hut in logos
    couolda been worded better but okish

    ryno got this

    v/ryno

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    Re: Week 1: Ryno (0-0) vs. malediction (0-0) - OPEN FOR VOTES


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    Re: Week 1: Ryno (0-0) vs. malediction (0-0) - OPEN FOR VOTES

    can you edit my verse?

    i meant "contort" instead of "retort" (4th line)
    @Zunto @Wuxia


    Too late, votes already came in.

    -Zunto
    Last edited by Zunto; December 7th, 2021 at 03:46 PM
    aka Sorrow: the Broken Wing

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    Re: Week 1: Ryno (0-0) vs. malediction (0-0)

    Quote Originally Posted by Ryno View Post
    Malediction aka Elegant Elephant

    I could never rock or hit a spot w/ u. So fkn suspect how could ur style compel us?
    If male clubs w/ the pole by his side, it’s cuz he’s got his dick swingin for a crowd of fellas.
    Would be decent but the pronunciation is off here
    Them cartoonish antics’ll get u vanished. And trust me jack, I won’t care it hurts…
    Not only am I bringing Max Steel, I’m leaving ya face covered in it like that Psycho character.
    ok... decent flip but wording isn't clean
    Let me embellish this cats doom. Frauds like u always flex like it’s mad cool,
    Homie the only time u’ve had heat in ur palms, is using the hand dryer before u exit the bathroom.
    Light
    His women? Fables. U tap out w/ chicks cuz u never leave w/ a “winner” label,
    Ur dates don’t just end w/ the cold shoulder. Bitches RKO u right through the dinner table.
    Ok again
    Everything u package is lame. But this Mac range clearin ya flaws, every ounce…
    W/O a doubt. Let’s see if Male man enough to deliver once I bring the dawgs out the house.
    Pronunciation again
    Wux sent u to the wrong stop, screwed. Him killing Ry? It’s a long shot, true…
    I’ll skin dude. Then leave Elephant bones on display like that scene from Ong Bak 2.
    lol this is ok, had to do my research on the movie tho
    vs

    Quote Originally Posted by malediction View Post
    1st off the name is Mal, the E is silent clown
    And I kick ish and bout to relieve your bowels
    Statement
    My knife’ll part your flesh, dude my mark is death
    I’ll retort your body... till you fart your breath
    not feeling this... tbh even reading contort using the word fart softens it for me
    Fine bro I got your back, talking your spinal
    bars you spit are wack, the sites like Ry NO!!!
    Basic flip
    You’re a son of a gun and i’m about cannons
    Separate spirit from body till you're out standing
    Not feeling this, the setup was going toward a flip on guns then the punch is out/standing so it isn't working for me
    I know, i know, that’s a far reach, you bore ish
    I’m to the letter and you’re Stark par, a poor Knick
    I get the reference here but not the punch... Starks isn't poor
    You’re OK if it’s true things look better in slow-mo
    and i’ll light up your top like pizza hut in logos
    ok concept
    I got Ryno winning this one even with the botched pronunciation, set ups and punches worked better overall and the concepts were more clever.

    Edited to change Mal's verse color to neutral

    V/Ryno
    Last edited by Justice Grimm; December 8th, 2021 at 01:58 PM

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    Re: Week 1: Ryno (0-0) vs. malediction (0-0) - OPEN FOR VOTES

    Ryno - that palm/dryer line was pretty cool. I thought the rko thru the dinner table was dope fasho.

    Male man - start reading thru the archives so you can get a better understanding of how verses work around here, I could tell you new to this shit.

    Vote / Ryno

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    Re: Week 1: Ryno (0-0) vs. malediction (0-0) - OPEN FOR VOTES

    I could never rock or hit a spot w/ u. So fkn suspect how could ur style compel us?
    If male clubs w/ the pole by his side, it’s cuz he’s got his dick swingin for a crowd of fellas.
    Forced as that isn't how his name is pronounced
    Them cartoonish antics’ll get u vanished. And trust me jack, I won’t care it hurts…
    Not only am I bringing Max Steel, I’m leaving ya face covered in it like that Psycho character.
    Choppy... doesnt flow well
    Let me embellish this cats doom. Frauds like u always flex like it’s mad cool,
    Homie the only time u’ve had heat in ur palms, is using the hand dryer before u exit the bathroom.
    This could have been worded 100x cleaner
    His women? Fables. U tap out w/ chicks cuz u never leave w/ a “winner” label,
    Ur dates don’t just end w/ the cold shoulder. Bitches RKO u right through the dinner table.
    Again the wording kills the concept
    Everything u package is lame. But this Mac range clearin ya flaws, every ounce…
    W/O a doubt. Let’s see if Male man enough to deliver once I bring the dawgs out the house.
    Forced again with the name
    Wux sent u to the wrong stop, screwed. Him killing Ry? It’s a long shot, true…
    I’ll skin dude. Then leave Elephant bones on display like that scene from Ong Bak 2.
    Eh... nah

    vs

    1st off the name is Mal, the E is silent clown
    And I kick ish and bout to relieve your bowels
    No
    My knife’ll part your flesh, dude my mark is death
    I’ll retort your body... till you fart your breath
    God no
    Fine bro I got your back, talking your spinal
    bars you spit are wack, the sites like Ry NO!!!
    This is an attempt... super basic though
    You’re a son of a gun and i’m about cannons
    Separate spirit from body till you're out standing
    No
    I know, i know, that’s a far reach, you bore ish
    I’m to the letter and you’re Stark par, a poor Knick
    No
    You’re OK if it’s true things look better in slow-mo
    and i’ll light up your top like pizza hut in logos
    Its like you have some concepts in mind, but you just aren't developing them.

    v/ Ryno... I guess... both really need to work on having the punches flow better and not be so forced and choppy
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    Re: Week 1: Ryno (0-0) vs. malediction (0-0) - OPEN FOR VOTES

    Them cartoonish antics’ll get u vanished. And trust me jack, I won’t care it hurts…
    Not only am I bringing Max Steel, I’m leaving ya face covered in it like that Psycho character.
    Let me embellish this cats doom. Frauds like u always flex like it’s mad cool,
    Homie the only time u’ve had heat in ur palms, is using the hand dryer before u exit the bathroom.

    vs

    nothing much (compared to Ryno), some attempts here and there but need to be more elaborated


    v. ryno

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    Re: Week 1: Ryno (0-0) vs. malediction (0-0) - OPEN FOR VOTES

    I could never rock or hit a spot w/ u. So fkn suspect how could ur style compel us?
    If male clubs w/ the pole by his side, it’s cuz he’s got his dick swingin for a crowd of fellas.
    cool opener
    Them cartoonish antics’ll get u vanished. And trust me jack, I won’t care it hurts…
    Not only am I bringing Max Steel, I’m leaving ya face covered in it like that Psycho character.
    I think you could’ve improved on wording but I liked the concept
    Let me embellish this cats doom. Frauds like u always flex like it’s mad cool,
    Homie the only time u’ve had heat in ur palms, is using the hand dryer before u exit the bathroom.
    I mean yeah it works but kinda corny lol. Decent tho
    His women? Fables. U tap out w/ chicks cuz u never leave w/ a “winner” label,
    Ur dates don’t just end w/ the cold shoulder. Bitches RKO u right through the dinner table.
    dope lol
    Everything u package is lame. But this Mac range clearin ya flaws, every ounce…
    W/O a doubt. Let’s see if Male man enough to deliver once I bring the dawgs out the house.
    I think the mailman play could’ve been done better but this was decent
    Wux sent u to the wrong stop, screwed. Him killing Ry? It’s a long shot, true…
    I’ll skin dude. Then leave Elephant bones on display like that scene from Ong Bak 2.
    never seen this movie lol, couldn’t find anything when I google searched “the elephant display bones from ong bak 2 movie”


    Vs


    1st off the name is Mal, the E is silent clown
    And I kick ish and bout to relieve your bowels
    nah
    My knife’ll part your flesh, dude my mark is death
    I’ll retort your body... till you fart your breath
    lmao nah
    Fine bro I got your back, talking your spinal
    bars you spit are wack, the sites like Ry NO!!!
    gone. This wasn’t good
    You’re a son of a gun and i’m about cannons
    Separate spirit from body till you're out standing
    had potential
    I know, i know, that’s a far reach, you bore ish
    I’m to the letter and you’re Stark par, a poor Knick
    no
    You’re OK if it’s true things look better in slow-mo
    and i’ll light up your top like pizza hut in logos
    nah


    Literally baffles me how malediction can beat fresh in a 1-2 punch with a decent bar, then drop some lousy pre k rhymes here. Smh. Ryno had some dope lines and also some misses but did more than enough to take this one.


    Vote Ryno

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    Re: Week 1: Ryno (0-0) vs. malediction (0-0) - OPEN FOR VOTES

    Ryno, Hand dryer & RKO were solid. Ong Bak had potential, but was wordy. The rest didnt do alot for me.

    Malediction, Ry-No was funny. And the pizzahut line was serviceable, but the rest fell flat for me. This was still a big improvement fro. Your FL tourny verse.

    I got Ryno edging this, but it was kind of close.

    Vote - Ryno

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    Re: Week 1: Ryno (0-0) vs. malediction (0-0) - OPEN FOR VOTES

    Ryno Wins 7-0

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