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    Forever is Never Enough


    It was a moment of freedom
    pure
    intoxication
    and lust.

    Bliss.

    No interruptions
    no budgets
    nor meetings to discuss.

    Just a swallow of wine,
    rain kissing the streets,
    as Billie Holidays sings,
    “There’s nothing sweeter than me”.

    Ambient jazz: the trolley tram rattles the tracks
    blowing it’s horn like a brass Patterson sax.
    Going nowhere fast on the Coltrane in the city
    Just me and my Cindy slowly dancing to Dizzy.

    A poetic release; so romantic and sweet.
    she’s holding me close while I’m plucking her strings.
    “Killing her Softly” with subtle intrigue.

    Love suddenly seems
    so obtainably near
    as cloudy skies open up
    and the sun reappears.

    The song comes to a pause.
    The needle’s lifted and stalled.
    And at the end of it all
    we are simply in awe
    at the tune that we made
    on Bourbon St and LePaul
    on that musical day
    in the middle of fall.

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    Re: Forever is Never Enough

    Let me start by saying in recent years I just got into Jazz. I loved the theme of this and how you wrote it. References throughout were dope you snuck in dizzy gillespie too I liked that. Your lines have a meter to them that doesn’t miss a beat. I didn’t catch it at first but a bit into this I realized it had that jazz swing to it. You can tap your foot to this. You described the fuck out of this picture lol. This was an amazing take on it.

    AI

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