fight back

[2Tone]

Yo, yo,
Listen dawg,
you can call me a fuck up and all
but I didn’t ask u to go and tell the whole world
but thanks u are great
should I call u a master of all?
hey dawg,
do you even know how to play ball? “no, right”?
Well let me teach u the game called basketball
Damn dawg, you act like a bitch ass Barbie doll
who cant even play with a fucking ball
fuck it
mabe I’ll just call u “Daisy”? haha
then u can go sit around and act crazy
you think that callin me “wack” got you some more respect
from your own crew who already knew the bullshit that u always do??
nah, I’m just playing, it is how it is
i aint good, I try at least
but putting me down like that doesn’t mean shit
yea niggaz like u know how to spit
but face it
I aint Biggie,
that G rests in peace and I’m livin’
I aint got enough words to talk shit to you?
Hey, at least they got meaning, so fuck you
but its on you dawg
you do what u wanna do
just watch your back foo’
cuz u don’t know the next thing that I’ll do
peace

[Maven.]

dude, this was so half assed, don't even bother posting them if you're not gonna work on them.
First of all, write about something you care about....something that means something to you. Secondly, try to have a fairly constant rhyme scheme, at least at first, so it's easier for the reader to find the flow. Thirdly, try to describe things...use vocabulary and similes and metaphors and it will greatly improve your content.
A way to improve your flow is to try to have the same number of syllables in every line.
Try harder next time.

[Edicius]

^What he said.