13th Amendment Present (Am I A Terrorist)

[Key Tone]

::Am I A Terrorist::


::Chorus::

..A terrorist, u can tell by the terror on my face..
..A terrorist, u can see it in my eyes 'm bound to catch a case..
..Battling to keep my dignity for my community..
..sharp shooting my enemy!..
..One man soldier, Allah can't u see how their killing me!..


..God help me for I've gone all out, half crazy..
..Mind bugging, num to surprises nothin' amazes me!..
..I seen beef ending up on over heated pan...
..Battle boxing many men out to plot over my plans..
..Connectin' new friends to help me with my controbands..
..I mean I got heart to see wrong and do right..
..But my heart gets weak and easy to be decieved with out a fight..
..Terrorized terrorizing in terror pickin' darkness over the light!..
..Made chaos and lost good friends in the night..
..That's why it hard for me to remain polite!..
..Still looked as a terrorist no matter if my colar work line is white!..

::Chorus::

..A terrorist, u can tell by the terror on my face..
..A terrorist, u can see it in my eyes 'm bound to catch a case..
..Battling to keep my dignity for my community..
..sharp shooting my enemy!..
..One man soldier, Allah can't u see how their killing me!..


..I had a dream that I died for the cause..
..Suplied for the boss!,Still got hung on the cross..
..A terrorist by nature, rather fade ya than fake ya!..
..Transforming my body power like a Power Ranger!..
..Am a explosive stranger I take u out when I take out my anger!..
..Far from fragile agile to bring murder to ya boarder!..
..I order u dead in order to keep my head above water!..
..Askin' why I bring terror and write a love letter!..
..I hate to love- love to hate to feel better!..
..I got the temper-sure to melt ya butter!..
..Bush Bring beef to our African parking lot..
..Sadam they got, Osama is lost in the same spot..


..Enjoy....

[ILLunatic]

Pretty interesting
Some decent imagery
decent flow..
You had more imagery than emotion
Overall.. pretty nice
keep it up

[Key Tone]

Thanks.

Uppun....

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[GołÐзŋ¤G¥ął]

nice flow nice structure enjoyed rppin that sounds hevy

[Key Tone]

Thanks.

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Imputent Creaturez.......Where is the Love....

[Spartacus]

Whoa....

Yea This Was Hot.. Hey Eyeronik.. Get At Me Wit A PM I Wanna Ax You Sumthin

[Andrew..]

Nice peice
Good job on the flow
the structure was ok but not great
Imaginary
Total: 7/10
Hit up "Deaf Of A Friend" Link in sig
keep droppin
peace

[Key Tone]

Thank you sir!!!

[Prince Adem]

Dope... structure was nice and it made for a good flow.... some nice wordplay was in their, like the Power Ranger line... vocab was good, but i felt you could've used more multies... but oh well, dope nonetheless

I liked the message you brought out and I can relate to it... good emotion explained with good language

keep it up!

[Telekinetic]

Dope shit man
It flowed pretty well some parts better than others
"..God help me for I've gone all out, half crazy..
..Mind bugging, num to surprises nothin' amazes me!.." nice shit
"..Askin' why I bring terror and write a love letter!..
..I hate to love- love to hate to feel better!.." once again nice shit

I could feal alot of heart in this keep that shit commin
Love that make you think type of shit good job you was killin it

[Key Tone]

Thank you for being so hospitable.lol Did i spell that right.

I apreciate the feed.

[a-list]

The last verse and hook were dope.If u could just tighten da flow in da other verses tis would be hott

[Funky_phizzle]

That was my favourit for today, rhyme scheme was there and on top
Topic u used was nicely brought across, there aint a favourite verse u dropped,
all of it was favoured at a high extent for me, keep pushing those deep verses
as so many other talented writers do on this... Peace Out...

[Key Tone]

Thai Warrior i apreciate it damn BIg Azz dragon....^^^^