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Thread: Trashed Youth

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    Trashed Youth

    We passed through, the musty hands of a trashed youth..
    To attach to, anything chastised and half truth..
    A stand still, or as we call it -- slabbed proof..
    Were ninety eight percent of man kills for (what?) the last two..
    A black moon, eclipsed in hopes to map you your path of flight..
    Exposed in the cast of night, but in the midst of captions..
    Who's got the passion to write?
    The passion to fight for, the lower class of society..
    With more heart than the average..
    Despite the lack of universal insight and gladness..
    Stop the madness! kids stand at the hip stranded..
    Coached by chances of, becoming rich from grams flipped..
    Until the land shifts, and tilts from a stripped balance..
    Still lit to the axis, where my, split habits kept me in-depth,
    With the seeing power of a mythed Atlantis..
    Rhythmic isms and planned hits, we used to talk with hands crisp..
    'Cause back then, melodies where mixed with sand script..
    But in deep thought, I see things more clearly..
    And near me lies my old self I left somewhat needy..
    Believe me, it's way beyond belief, how to determine a meaning..
    When gravity reacts, all bullshit is seen stampeding..
    I stand receiving, the guidance the pressure from caressing eye lids..
    Spending time with, blind men, who can still appreciate the iris..
    For when described they come alive, their sight becomes silenced..
    Reminded of a life worth seeing, but never quite perceived with grace..
    And when the sun sets I'm done with my disguise for the day..
    To just relax with faults, no worries on both sides of the way
    Cried for the will, cried for the day..
    That'll never cry for those who cried for the same..
    Pride remained definitive, thought described in a frame of mind..
    Fine with being different, here's your deliverance..




    ...On A Naked Tree [ft.Langston Hughes]
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    Man i read this peice before i know, but everytime it takes the cake for being dope as fuck. Yea your king.

    "A stand still, or as we call it -- slabbed proof..
    Were ninety eight percent of man kills for (what?) the last two.. "

    uhhhh...

    thats dope.

    way to go. Write more. lata.

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    Thanks fam.

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    this was good...i like the multies and wordplay gave it more impact structure was choppy in a couple places but other than that this was a solid drop...keep em coming ~!1!~

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    Appreciate it.

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    good shit multies were nice internals rhyme good only prob i really see is structure choppy in places other than that nice shit man and hit up the shit in sig alright
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    This was cool. The topic wasn't very concrete, but more wondering and abstract. The flow was aight. The multis were good, but seemed forced a couple times, like this line...

    "A stand still, or as we call it -- slabbed proof.. "

    That just didn't seem to fit. Besides that, it was a pretty cool piece. Keep up the good work.

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    Appreciate the looks.

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    Up.

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