Damn Freeman nice. You had alot of emotion and some nice details. Im not affended by this because I have no idea what has gone wrong in your life to provoke these feelings but it was a nice piece.
Damn Freeman nice. You had alot of emotion and some nice details. Im not affended by this because I have no idea what has gone wrong in your life to provoke these feelings but it was a nice piece.
Lol, Dev, funny dude.
Im glad i riled so many people with this piece.
Aint techinically good, or whatever (its late, shut up) - but it sure pissed alot of you off, for no reason.
Fuck you all (except Euth members, and Dev.)
hahahahah, im so drunk.
Fuck, off.
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ill beat you
Bittersweet
^^ah no you wont....
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good but typical, alotta people go through this but shit happens, you can't stop it
ive writtin alotta shit liek this but you gotta come and ralize like...lfe is fucked up i know youe must of herd that before but it's true, life is fucked up yo can't blame someone youve never seen but believe in, n who you blame doesn't blame you.
ANNIHILATION
OR
DESTRUCTION
This definately wasn't your best work...
Too much whining for me, man.
But I understand the concept and what you've gone through recently.
So I'm cool with it.
The only thing I really liked here was the emotion displayed.
Good anger, good confusion showed.
The lines could have been more one length, you hadda lotta skips in your scheme and flow...well, to me ya did, justa bit.
But, dude, as far as topic, we all feel like hating "God" at times.
I hope letting this out was medicinal for ya.
Peace
Ok I strongly believe in God and reading this piece seriously made me cringe, but hey, tis entirely up to you how you feel. God gave us free will, your just SERIOUSLY exercising it
The piece itself; It was emotive, I could feel your pain, but the content was simple, although the repition made you come accross as completely besotted with misery and hate.
Overall though weak on language but good on emotion I know it was written in like 5 minutes (I read all the posts *pops collar* lol)
Anywho, if you do deside you want to chat on it, you know where to find me. Nuff luv jellybean
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~Current Battles~
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Born, yeah i know..
I will make it up by writing a good piece soon. Not in the mood now.
Liz, rawr..
Sorry, i believe in God too, im just not his friend right now.
I might have to take you up on that offer soon.
I shall PM you now.
Peace.
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Bleh. I did a poem like this a few years ago. It's ok. Good to see you back and writing again.
-W1
Hence Forward
axis powers
I'm wack Dev ? You're funny lol. I won't say anything else. Both of you are wasting my time. Dev is gonna topical battle all the "haters" lmao. What the fuck have you won here or accomplished ? Jeah.
^^one word... hmm.. lemme see..... ah.. oh yes.... PRICK!
you couldnt beat one off, never mind beat an opponent
oh and im in OM of the month like 7 times
i got both topical awards
been nominated for legends, just aint gettin in yet, but i will...
anyways, id beat your ass any day at topical... so go suck on a mango
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