Brothers(chapter-One)

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Wall street= purple and .Symbol.= black

12:00 Am.....Nine-Teen-Ninety-One Symbol Was Conceived
Kind Of Hard Looking Back He In Coma And Only Thirteen
This Is A Big Problem To Cure.. It'll Take More Then Aleve
Eye Witnesses It, So On There Count Aint Shit Bin Achieved
Looking Down On My Bro Symbol, Like This A Movie Scene
Waiting In The Hospital With Him Like It's A Moving Dream
Nightmares Hound My Dreams, Just Watching Symbol Sleep
Wondering Is He Aiight.. Or Was He A Victim Of The Street
Can't Sleep Can't Shower, I'm With Him For Weeks Straight
Sitting In The Hospital Chair Hoping & Praying He Awakes
My Head Throbs With Thoughts, Wondering If He Makes It
Where's God On This One,Blood In His Mouth I Can Taste It
Images Racing, Chest Aching,I'm Waiting For A Sign Of Life
I'm Living For My Brother Now.. And Putting Aside My Wife
Looking Back To Every Sec Before They Pulled The Trigger
Without Him It'll Be Different.. Like A Light With No Flicker
Posted on the block just talkin to my bro Wall Street
All tired…Symptoms I see, I need sleep, all weak
All bored, I see an accord and a ford slowly roll by
Tinted on all four, slowing down…thinkin I ask why
Now right in front of us…on stand by, I hang tight
Windows rolling down I see the middle finger hands high
Fuck hang tight, gun shot loose while Wall Street ran right
Shot at the back trice, it was like if I was banned from life
It’s like in a coma…I can hear all those sittin by my side
Holding for my bear life, it’s just hard to survive
The voice of my bro, praying to God I won’t die
At the same time, for him it’s hard to put aside his wife
Now in my dream, I see, the better future in me
That I would grow up to be, someone past the age of 13
I’m afraid of change, but it’s never too late
A twitch…a wink, noticing that I’ll soon be awake


Looking Back It's Crazy I Still Remember~The~Date
Two-Thousand-And-Four... On December~The~Eight
Whenever-It-Breaks Out,... I Know He'll Get~Nervous
Cause I Felt Is Pain In ICU Like God Left~His~Service
And I Know Looking Back It's Hard To Believe~It~Man
But When He Catches Flashes I'm Like Breath~In~Fam
Weird...Through Everything I Stuck With Em All~Night
While Our Moms And Pops...... Didn't Even Call~Twice
A year later now posted on the same ol’ block
Those close to me knows my life is far from a stop
But I still look back at, the tragedy that happened to me
Changed the way I live like a players strategy
Still walkin on both feet, not paralyzed yet it shows me
I have my whole life ahead of me to walk on 3 feet
Karma…what goes around comes around you see
So I guess that goes to the punk ass bitch that did this to me

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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...08#post2663508


http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...20#post2663520

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uppin for some feed back................................

[Facts Machine]

This was original and creative.
The story-line with color scheme was cool and you made everything clear to understand.
The emotion was ok, but not on a poetic tip though.
The vocabulary fit in well, but maybe more complex rhyming would of made it better.. I liked the rhymescheme though, cuz u did internals and had some multies, some just seemed simplistic and predictible. This was like the pre-what goes around comes around type of shit... it was interesting.

keep at it.

[Dan Dare]

Edit: Re-opened.

His new links:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...203#post2666203
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...181#post2666181

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i enjoyed this,

it was easy to read and the way they wrote it i could almost picture it in my mind, it was very creative and had some really strong points.....i think that maybe it could have used a little more emotion if you know what i mean ut overall a very exceptional verse

[EzDizy]

its was very creative..it reminded me of like song biggie would write cause he always told a story in his music and you felt like you was there with him..nicely written and the color scheme was nice to add liek a personal touch to it..good shit man nice reading

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