[B]my first real drop[/B](check this shit out)

[ryhmin for the t]

i am mad as hell my day just aint going that well
i feel like ive been jumped and had my wades stolen
like i just folded a flush of spades ace high
i might as well been dissed because my race
but i got a solution a magic potion
what a notion here take a sip
and prepare for the ultimate trip


i am doing alot better my day is looking up
i feel like i just got a new pistons sweater
like i just jumped some guy name winston for his rolex
or that like the hex has been lifted
and im so high i feel like i just drifted off
and sniffed about 4 grams of coke
and folks this aint no joke


i'm so high i feel like i can fly like shaq
drive it right to the rack
alley oop straight from wade
360 jam threw the legs
wheres my fucking parade
i can hit from down town
reggie miller got nothing on me

[ryhmin for the t]

let me know what ya think

[dopestspitaeva]

basicaly what i thouight instantly is this.. flow structure was good.. the rhymes or rather lack of rhymes was terrible.. there was no rhyme scheme.. a lot of lines rhymed with nothing..all good for a poem.. but
so yeah get those rhyme skills up somme mo aint no thing .. coz yeah u got good rythm ...good poetics.. keep poppin

pz1