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Thread: thru my wire..check it...real new

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    thru my wire..check it...real new

    thru my wires

    thru my wires, my whole life is explained/
    from when i feel happi, to when i feel drained/
    thru my wire, my whole life is let out, n reaveled/
    information come out that for ages has been concealed/
    but inside a me, i still have my own dark rooms/
    cant ever take a break, try n put life on pause, but it always seems to resume/
    had twoparents, father from the country, and moms from the city/
    both bore one kid who as dark as p.diddy/
    2 parents, from dominican republic, middle of the carribean/
    still remember in 96, hurricane george sent everything into olbivion/
    grew up in the pj's, been here for 14, been here since he was one/
    but before him, moms had another cat n bore one son/
    became his olda brotha, jose, now he 21 years old/
    who had his taste of racism, but no matta wut he stood bold/
    but this kid ralfy, was real energetic, like the energizer bunny/
    times was hard, cuz the fam aint have to much money/
    he jumped, ran, n liked to go on explorations/
    2 cuzins tommy, n kevin, his closets relations/
    he grew up good, went to public school, n now in catholic/
    been called many names, like blacky even tho he was his-panic/
    adversity comes his way, every so often/
    sometimes he feel like hidden away, or dien in a coffin/
    many people crossed my path, from dealers, to assholes, to beauty's n bitches/
    was in the hospital for 3 dayz, cuz doctors feared my nitely twitches/
    thought i was sick minded n suffered from siezures/
    does all this shyt, but onli when he time is liezure/
    from playin ball, to chillen, to speakin his mind/
    sorta like this song, tryna put his life in line/

    see, i always dreamed a bein a star/
    always knew it was in my reach, never 2 far/
    at times, i wanted to be a track star, or another bill gates/
    who have so much money, he would have gold plated plates/
    but now i like basketball better, wanna be like tracy mcgrady/
    been workin hard at the game, but it has yet to pay me/
    it comin thru now, but i also wouldnt mind being mr.music, the next jay-z/
    the nigga that'll have ur head poppin, n have the ladies screamin like crazy/
    dominican down to my viens, that neva changed/
    my whole life in a nutshell i just explained/
    from tiffany, geraldine, shani, all my x gurlz/
    but then there was ashley, my first luv in this world/
    got many emotional scars cuz of gurlz but its all good/
    still keep on striven in my fucked up hood
    but then i got my #1. people, from jen to james/
    4 years deep nigga! n cot-fuckin-damn u still aint change/
    from the drama with ic, to shani n em/
    notice how we bounce from crew to crew thats full of feminine/
    lol, its been real funny, all i can do now is laugh/
    have made many choices, thnk God, i've chosen the right path/
    got nothin more to say, just hope, God gonna grant me many many more years/
    that i aint stuck in a office, with a boring as career/
    said a lot, thru these wires holdin each one of my teeth/
    my fingers also spoke for me, the truths been unleashed/



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    the signifigance of the wire thing..is that i have braces lol

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    i love this poem....it was different...it seemed like your voice was coming through my speakers....conversing....tellin your life story....another reason i like this is because it sounds like something my brother would write....lol ...
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    Honestly, I wasn't so sure about reading all that. Sometimes it sucks to read something long that isn't good. But once I got into it, I liked it.

    You told a good story about your life, the friends you have, family, and what you hope to be one day. I liked reading this a lot. I'd give you tips on how to get better but I don't think this should be changed at all. You wrote pretty good here. I'm glad I did take the time to read all of it Keep posting..

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