10 lines, due whenever
gl
_ Martyr_
Lyricalbrutality
10 lines, due whenever
gl
Introducing myself to Yall Martyr Never failing
Strap a Pressure bomb then hug you,Faggot cant be bailing
I been known for being suicidal and terrorizing towns
I scare you off Like kids with a phobia from clowns
Religion drives my motives and entices my emotions
I'm David with a slingshot Your Goliath Taken down
I've adjusted your frame and foiled your plans of fame
Like the survivor chick after the sex tape shame
Leave you sinking in the sand without a helping hand
Dead like Eminems' Stan dont cry easy on your tear glands
sorry i took a while, girlfriend called and i couldn't get rid of her haha
Aaiiight
Whaddup, i'm proper mad skilled so better drive away in your fuckin car!
SYKE, i wouldn't drop a line like that, that was Martyr attempting my first bar
I'm gonna win this without wasting a single decent concept on this guy
If he's what he says he is he wont need the help of my punches to die (Martyr)
Yeah that above line was weak, I guess i'm just having fun
A quick keystyle and nothing more is needed to beat this bum
I would say practice in cypher but your not ready for RB on the whole..
Shit you proved my point 10 mins ago when you fucked up the battle poll
Consider yourself lucky that i wen't easy on you by dropping my whackest diss
Cuz if you were worth 5 minutes of my time, i'd actually punch with fists
Just a quick keystyle
Votes
weak battle. L.B. had a coo personal with the battle pole line. elevate tho..
vote brutality
MackNifi$ent=Oakland Raider...Remember me yall?
Myspace me...Myspace.com/mackbeast
upped
not much
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Whaddup, i'm proper mad skilled so better drive away in your fuckin car!
SYKE, i wouldn't drop a line like that, that was Martyr attempting my first bar
-eh
I'm gonna win this without wasting a single decent concept on this guy
If he's what he says he is he wont need the help of my punches to die
-basic
(Martyr)
Yeah that above line was weak, I guess i'm just having fun
A quick keystyle and nothing more is needed to beat this bum
-very true
I would say practice in cypher but your not ready for RB on the whole..
Shit you proved my point 10 mins ago when you fucked up the battle poll
-made me chuckle
Consider yourself lucky that i wen't easy on you by dropping my whackest diss
Cuz if you were worth 5 minutes of my time, i'd actually punch with fists
-cool ish i guess
clear win to brute
peep my battle vs broken
Make sure you spell your competitors names right in the poll. You could have just gave a completely different user a loss/win who didn't deserve it.
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opener: brutality
multies: none (damn shame lol)
metaphors: tie (i didnt really see any..maybe you can say martyr) lol
punches: brutality
personals: brutality
nameplay/wordplay: brutality (just a name drop, lol)
flow/structure: brutality
closer: brutality
overall: brutality, id like to think ya'll was in a hurry lol
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tear glands...you really fucking used that in a rap battle...
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Lyrical barely caring and still Rodney King'n his ass
i liked that poll thing though that was a strong personal
martyr go through the older battles or just think of something funny.
lyrical has a pic on his profile now so pick on that.
v/Lyrical
:vanja:
Dont give him tips to hurt me! Holy fuck!
*Deletes Pics*
Yeah,l I hardly have to say this battle was weak cause you both admitted that.. Lyrical IN his verse... and Martyr WITH his..
Martyr- You've got a decent audio typa flow but you brought no heat in the punch department. You didn't attack your opponent well enough at all for this to be considered close.
Lryical- You dropped poorly and got away with it because you're the far superior text battler imo, but drops like this won't help you keep your weight up.
Best Bars>>
I would say practice in cypher but your not ready for RB on the whole..
Shit you proved my point 10 mins ago when you fucked up the battle poll
V.s.
Nothing at all worth quoting..
V/ Lyrical
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...315/index.html
^hit that if ya'll want feed in the future
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...285/index.html
^and/or that
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LB- For someone whose cocky this was a weak drop. I mean you criticize your own verse within the verse and that takes away from the strenght of the verse. I mean im reading your verse and i think to myself this line was aight then i see the next line saying. yeah that line was wack.... so im like umm ok, maybe it wasnt aight. so avoid doing that there alot of ways to show self glory without throwing shots at yourself.
Martyr- You still have alot of elevating, you should throw dirrect punches at your opponent seeing as theyre the most effective, reference punches can be funny but you overused them and they werent that creative to being with. Be more creative use more witt and you'll see steady improvement.
v-LB.
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