LLL Season 11: Week 3
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LLL Season 11: Week 3
Standard Rules (can be found in LLL Office)
Check in by Wednesday
Drop by Midnight Friday (Eastern Time)
16 Lines Minimum
Vote on 5 Battles
Leave links in your check in or lose 2 votes per missing link
Good Luck
Last edited by $in City; July 26th, 2009 at 07:46 PM
if you born to kill, im laughin at the thought of an expirin thug
they say the way to a mans hearts thru his stomach, so that’s where im firin slugs
B must be on drugs cuz he’s hallucinating how I took his respect
born sees midgets,
talkin bout how $in spit in his face amphetamine hook to his chest
he shook from the threat, cuz if I see em in person I’ll do more than diss the bum
matter fact he’ll end up on his back, wit a pair of medics lookin like they kissin em
n the thought of me pluggin ya ugly ass wife’s got ya mental racin
I don’t know about chuuu,
but im runnin more trains thru the bitch than grand central station
now he probably getting upset, but the old man aint hurtin me fellas
cuz i’ll choke him till he has such a red neck, that jeff foxworthy gets jealous
ya old and rusty, everyday ya rhyme skill’s getting gray n wrinkled
ya styles been so dated and played, that now it just wants to stay single
BTK is lame as fuck I think he need to sit back, relax and resign
cuz nowdays he could never be hippie just wishes we was back in those times
Born was born during a war, but back then they aint accept flamin fucks
only reason he dodged the draft, s’cuz the army tried to hit em with one of the trucks
you bite peoples rhymes, cuz its the only way ya shitty lines might get mentioned
but u should know better,
cuz bein old enough for social security, gives you no right to be pension
18
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Playin like you’s the city, but ya gay up the name how you relate...
What happens in Vegas stays in Vegas, until the dude ejaculates.
Ya all about that city's flash; bright lights and bling, shiny threads...
So I’ll give you a striking object, and crash a hammer thru ya head.
Appearance has peeps shook, beach bum and step-kid combined...
Sportin such an OP look, you could put Mayberry back on primetime.
Ya woman makin heads twirl, causing you to look like a bum...
Kid, I’ve fucked a ton of girls; you fuck one that weighs a ton.
Are you dope or fly? Neither one’s right...no one’s believin...
Last debate I heard this stupid, was whether it’s duck or rabbit season.
Ya lack of heat‘s a pity, can’t claim hot so save ya breath...
AC/DC rocked Sin City, then Bon Scott froze to death.
Vegas gonna darken when I run you over or gouge ya face...
Levolor blind ya ass so bad, it’ll cover every window in ya state!
I’ll be outdoing history, when I gut this bitch’s frame...
And leave you with a Caesar cut that’ll put Brutus to shame.
An animated Rourke in ya avy? Really, Alba should be the pic...
You shouldn’t be reppin Marv, when you’re really more of a bitch.
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vs
if you born to kill, im laughin at the thought of an expirin thug
they say the way to a mans hearts thru his stomach, so that’s where im firin slugs
mehh
B must be on drugs cuz he’s hallucinating how I took his respect
born sees midgets,
talkin bout how $in spit in his face amphetamine hook to his chest
decent, cool wp
he shook from the threat, cuz if I see em in person I’ll do more than diss the bum
matter fact he’ll end up on his back, wit a pair of medics lookin like they kissin em
ehh
n the thought of me pluggin ya ugly ass wife’s got ya mental racin
I don’t know about chuuu,
but im runnin more trains thru the bitch than grand central station
nah played
now he probably getting upset, but the old man aint hurtin me fellas
cuz i’ll choke him till he has such a red neck, that jeff foxworthy gets jealous
ok
ya old and rusty, everyday ya rhyme skill’s getting gray n wrinkled
ya styles been so dated and played, that now it just wants to stay single
coo
BTK is lame as fuck I think he need to sit back, relax and resign
cuz nowdays he could never be hippie just wishes we was back in those times
nah
Born was born during a war, but back then they aint accept flamin fucks
only reason he dodged the draft, s’cuz the army tried to hit em with one of the trucks
mehh
you bite peoples rhymes, cuz its the only way ya shitty lines might get mentioned
but u should know better,
cuz bein old enough for social security, gives you no right to be pension
nah
overall- this was a decent battle. both had some ok verses, but i thought BTK was more consistent here. he had a stronger verse overall imo.
v/ BTK
A.rtificial I.ntelligence
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if you born to kill, im laughin at the thought of an expirin thug
they say the way to a mans hearts thru his stomach, so that’s where im firin slugs
played, wording crisp tho
B must be on drugs cuz he’s hallucinating how I took his respect
born sees midgets,
talkin bout how $in spit in his face amphetamine hook to his chest
too forced
he shook from the threat, cuz if I see em in person I’ll do more than diss the bum
matter fact he’ll end up on his back, wit a pair of medics lookin like they kissin em
average at best
n the thought of me pluggin ya ugly ass wife’s got ya mental racin
I don’t know about chuuu,
but im runnin more trains thru the bitch than grand central station
played
now he probably getting upset, but the old man aint hurtin me fellas
cuz i’ll choke him till he has such a red neck, that jeff foxworthy gets jealous
average
ya old and rusty, everyday ya rhyme skill’s getting gray n wrinkled
ya styles been so dated and played, that now it just wants to stay single
aight flip
BTK is lame as fuck I think he need to sit back, relax and resign
cuz nowdays he could never be hippie just wishes we was back in those times
not bad
Born was born during a war, but back then they aint accept flamin fucks
only reason he dodged the draft, s’cuz the army tried to hit em with one of the trucks
no...
you bite peoples rhymes, cuz its the only way ya shitty lines might get mentioned
but u should know better,
cuz bein old enough for social security, gives you no right to be pension
ehh
vs.
Playin like you’s the city, but ya gay up the name how you relate...
What happens in Vegas stays in Vegas, until the dude ejaculates.
i really didn't like this as a personal, could have flipped vegas idea a lot cooler
Ya all about that city's flash; bright lights and bling, shiny threads...
So I’ll give you a striking object, and crash a hammer thru ya head.
wording could have been a lot better, average i guess
Appearance has peeps shook, beach bum and step-kid combined...
Sportin such an OP look, you could put Mayberry back on primetime.
not that much of a baseball fan so maybe im not appreciating this properly, hard to comment
Ya woman makin heads twirl, causing you to look like a bum...
Kid, I’ve fucked a ton of girls; you fuck one that weighs a ton.
average, very simple
Are you dope or fly? Neither one’s right...no one’s believin...
Last debate I heard this stupid, was whether it’s duck or rabbit season.
meh, corny
Ya lack of heat‘s a pity, can’t claim hot so save ya breath...
AC/DC rocked Sin City, then Bon Scott froze to death.
average/aight
Vegas gonna darken when I run you over or gouge ya face...
Levolor blind ya ass so bad, it’ll cover every window in ya state!
seems a little forced, if it was levorol it would work better
I’ll be outdoing history, when I gut this bitch’s frame...
And leave you with a Caesar cut that’ll put Brutus to shame.
meh
An animated Rourke in ya avy? Really, Alba should be the pic...
You shouldn’t be reppin Marv, when you’re really more of a bitch.
meh
close battle, im leaning sin but will finalize my vote later
edit: v/ sin
Last edited by The Commisioner; July 25th, 2009 at 01:50 PM
now he probably getting upset, but the old man aint hurtin me fellas
cuz i’ll choke him till he has such a red neck, that jeff foxworthy gets jealous
ya old and rusty, everyday ya rhyme skill’s getting gray n wrinkled
ya styles been so dated and played, that now it just wants to stay single
Vs
Ya all about that city's flash; bright lights and bling, shiny threads...
So I’ll give you a striking object, and crash a hammer thru ya head.
Overall, Sin had a couple cool bars, but other than that, he had some weak concepts and a couple wordplays that didn't work.. one of them was forced and the other was used wrong when it comes to the wording up to the wordplay.. when it comes to Born's verse, I wasn't really feelin' his wordplay either, mostly because of how he used it.. other than that, surprisingly, he only had one quotable.. iunno if he just slacked off or what, but he had a lot of corny and simple concepts in his verse.. I got Sin winning this by a hair.. \\//ote: $in City
B must be on drugs cuz he’s hallucinating how I took his respect
born sees midgets,
talkin bout how $in spit in his face amphetamine hook to his chest
vs.
Ya woman makin heads twirl, causing you to look like a bum...
Kid, I’ve fucked a ton of girls; you fuck one that weighs a ton.
Vote//BTK - his verse had a few decent bars and i only liked one of Sin's...although sin's best line was harder than BTK's. close, but not a great battle.
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n the thought of me pluggin ya ugly ass wife’s got ya mental racin
I don’t know about chuuu,
but im runnin more trains thru the bitch than grand central station
BTK is lame as fuck I think he need to sit back, relax and resign
cuz nowdays he could never be hippie just wishes we was back in those times
Born was born during a war, but back then they aint accept flamin fucks
only reason he dodged the draft, s’cuz the army tried to hit em with one of the trucks
vs.
Playin like you’s the city, but ya gay up the name how you relate...
What happens in Vegas stays in Vegas, until the dude ejaculates.
Ya woman makin heads twirl, causing you to look like a bum...
Kid, I’ve fucked a ton of girls; you fuck one that weighs a ton.
Vegas gonna darken when I run you over or gouge ya face...
Levolor blind ya ass so bad, it’ll cover every window in ya state!
Decent battle here, a good amount of quotables. $in the first two quotables u had were nice n the draft dodger thing, coulda been worded better but was a cool concept. U def tried going original, the Amphetamine thing was a cool idea but i thought it was a lil forced. Foxworthy thing I seen before but I bet others haven't. Born, ur opener to me was the line of the battle, i laughed out loud at that shit! The fucked a ton of girls thing, it was a nice line, but borderline quotable. Levolor was really nice tho and the Bon Scott thing was decent too. Really tough battle to call, as I got the same number of quotables and both were about equally consistent throughout the rest. I gotta give it to someone, and I guess it's gonna be Born cuz everything else is even and his opener made me laugh.
Vote - Born
Vs.Sin
if you born to kill, im laughin at the thought of an expirin thug
they say the way to a mans hearts thru his stomach, so that’s where im firin slugs
There's not much you could have done with this flip, you limited your self to a cliche, often used in battle songs by many rappers..
B must be on drugs cuz he’s hallucinating how I took his respect
born sees midgets,
talkin bout how $in spit in his face amphetamine hook to his chest
kinda forced.. that is assuming you went for "and fed a mean" If the wordplay doesn't work.. I usually don't even give it a chance.. but I see it coming across different in speech... ehh.. just a bit iffy
he shook from the threat, cuz if I see em in person I’ll do more than diss the bum
matter fact he’ll end up on his back, wit a pair of medics lookin like they kissin em
I don't see the entire concept being worded in a fluent way. it first came off like you wanted him on his back, so i almost attached a "gay bar of the year" clause, to this line... it's decentish.. to much gun talk so far
n the thought of me pluggin ya ugly ass wife’s got ya mental racin
I don’t know about chuuu,
but im runnin more trains thru the bitch than grand central station
to simple.. almost patronizing..
now he probably getting upset, but the old man aint hurtin me fellas
cuz i’ll choke him till he has such a red neck, that jeff foxworthy gets jealous
i actually liked this..
ya old and rusty, everyday ya rhyme skill’s getting gray n wrinkled
ya styles been so dated and played, that now it just wants to stay single
ok.. no feelings on this.. i kinda like the simplistic flip.
BTK is lame as fuck I think he need to sit back, relax and resign
cuz nowdays he could never be hippie just wishes we was back in those times
funny
Born was born during a war, but back then they aint accept flamin fucks
only reason he dodged the draft, s’cuz the army tried to hit em with one of the trucks
decent wording.. old flip.. dodge lines.. old
you bite peoples rhymes, cuz its the only way ya shitty lines might get mentioned
but u should know better,
cuz bein old enough for social security, gives you no right to be pension
social security has no age limit.. only a minimum of 18... so, huh?
.BTK killer
Playin like you’s the city, but ya gay up the name how you relate...
What happens in Vegas stays in Vegas, until the dude ejaculates.
kinda humorous.. i don't like the wording of the punch.
Ya all about that city's flash; bright lights and bling, shiny threads...
So I’ll give you a striking object, and crash a hammer thru ya head.
ok..straight forward
Appearance has peeps shook, beach bum and step-kid combined...
Sportin such an OP look, you could put Mayberry back on primetime.
I don't know why, but I'm missing this totally..
Ya woman makin heads twirl, causing you to look like a bum...
Kid, I’ve fucked a ton of girls; you fuck one that weighs a ton.
funny ass punch
Are you dope or fly? Neither one’s right...no one’s believin...
Last debate I heard this stupid, was whether it’s duck or rabbit season.
again, i must be missing something..
Ya lack of heat‘s a pity, can’t claim hot so save ya breath...
AC/DC rocked Sin City, then Bon Scott froze to death.
pretty witty, had to look that up to see it. Your age is bringing out things my tiny 19 year old brain doesn't know!
Vegas gonna darken when I run you over or gouge ya face...
Levolor blind ya ass so bad, it’ll cover every window in ya state!
cool flip.. im guessing that's the name of some one he lost to.
I’ll be outdoing history, when I gut this bitch’s frame...
And leave you with a Caesar cut that’ll put Brutus to shame.
stop making me use google.. god damn it.. this is less than a battle, more like a history lesson.. cool punch..
An animated Rourke in ya avy? Really, Alba should be the pic...
You shouldn’t be reppin Marv, when you’re really more of a bitch.
cool
sin - you went a bit more generic in the start.. picked upa bit after with some age personals.. which gave your verse more depth and variety.. just remember to mix it up, and try to stray from ideas that seem to simple..like that train line..
fav line - foxworthy 1...
born - i think you played it safe.. looking to take a win off consistency.. i didn't see much creativity or risk taking in your wording... but a few clever and witty lines kept me interested enuff.. even a few personals. Given, i didn't get 2 of your lines.. maybe a bit to vague, or maybe just presumptuous that every one would get it.. i just know that I didn't..
over all - not a bad battle.. btk kept me entertained.. and sin showed up and made it a competition.. It's still not a close battle though in my eyes.. sin gave BTK to much room to just simplify punches and take the battle.
V/btk
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now he probably getting upset, but the old man aint hurtin me fellas
cuz i’ll choke him till he has such a red neck, that jeff foxworthy gets jealous
BTK is lame as fuck I think he need to sit back, relax and resign
cuz nowdays he could never be hippie just wishes we was back in those times
vs
Playin like you’s the city, but ya gay up the name how you relate...
What happens in Vegas stays in Vegas, until the dude ejaculates.
Ya woman makin heads twirl, causing you to look like a bum...
Kid, I’ve fucked a ton of girls; you fuck one that weighs a ton.
decent enough battle... but BTK's bad bars weren't as bad as $in's... but pretty even otherwise...
vote BTK by a bit...
ya old and rusty, everyday ya rhyme skill’s getting gray n wrinkled
ya styles been so dated and played, that now it just wants to stay single
BTK is lame as fuck I think he need to sit back, relax and resign
cuz nowdays he could never be hippie just wishes we was back in those times
Vs.
Nothing...
Vote: $in City, obviously a rushed verse from Born.. it looked like most of his lines hadn't really been thought out too well. $in's had a weak verse but had enough to take the win here.
if you born to kill, im laughin at the thought of an expirin thug
they say the way to a mans hearts thru his stomach, so that’s where im firin slugs
(nah..)
B must be on drugs cuz he’s hallucinating how I took his respect
born sees midgets,
talkin bout how $in spit in his face amphetamine hook to his chest
(too forced)
he shook from the threat, cuz if I see em in person I’ll do more than diss the bum
matter fact he’ll end up on his back, wit a pair of medics lookin like they kissin em
(nah, simp. comparison)
n the thought of me pluggin ya ugly ass wife’s got ya mental racin
I don’t know about chuuu,
but im runnin more trains thru the bitch than grand central station
(nah, simple simile, played)
now he probably getting upset, but the old man aint hurtin me fellas
cuz i’ll choke him till he has such a red neck, that jeff foxworthy gets jealous
(decent-ish)
ya old and rusty, everyday ya rhyme skill’s getting gray n wrinkled
ya styles been so dated and played, that now it just wants to stay single
(another simp. flip but cool-ish)
BTK is lame as fuck I think he need to sit back, relax and resign
cuz nowdays he could never be hippie just wishes we was back in those times
(heh, ok)
Born was born during a war, but back then they aint accept flamin fucks
only reason he dodged the draft, s’cuz the army tried to hit em with one of the trucks
(nah)
you bite peoples rhymes, cuz its the only way ya shitty lines might get mentioned
but u should know better,
cuz bein old enough for social security, gives you no right to be pension
(nah)
vs.
Playin like you’s the city, but ya gay up the name how you relate...
What happens in Vegas stays in Vegas, until the dude ejaculates.
(i see where you're going but wordings weird to me, okay though)
Ya all about that city's flash; bright lights and bling, shiny threads...
So I’ll give you a striking object, and crash a hammer thru ya head.
(seen it too much)
Appearance has peeps shook, beach bum and step-kid combined...
Sportin such an OP look, you could put Mayberry back on primetime.
(heh, ok)
Ya woman makin heads twirl, causing you to look like a bum...
Kid, I’ve fucked a ton of girls; you fuck one that weighs a ton.
(too simp i think, ok though)
Are you dope or fly? Neither one’s right...no one’s believin...
Last debate I heard this stupid, was whether it’s duck or rabbit season.
(heh, ok. creative)
Ya lack of heat‘s a pity, can’t claim hot so save ya breath...
AC/DC rocked Sin City, then Bon Scott froze to death.
(cool reference, ok punch)
Vegas gonna darken when I run you over or gouge ya face...
Levolor blind ya ass so bad, it’ll cover every window in ya state!
(lil forced but cool idea)
I’ll be outdoing history, when I gut this bitch’s frame...
And leave you with a Caesar cut that’ll put Brutus to shame.
(heh, pretty cool)
An animated Rourke in ya avy? Really, Alba should be the pic...
You shouldn’t be reppin Marv, when you’re really more of a bitch.
(eh, not a good closer)
Good battle, close. Sin had a lot of swag but BTK was way more polished, i think he takes this on consistency. V - Born
Born To Kill wins (2 - 1)
$in City loses (2 - 1)