5 bar battle.
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?485198-Killing-spree-vs-wrathoner-open-for-votes
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?485274-Enbombz-vs-E-Tha-Real-open-for-votes
Mushashi
NiccAteen
5 bar battle.
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?485198-Killing-spree-vs-wrathoner-open-for-votes
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?485274-Enbombz-vs-E-Tha-Real-open-for-votes
check gonna vote now
Watch this pussy shivering and quiverin, actin like an antsy vagina
Then see me drop niccateen quicker than a pulmonary cancer survivor
You can't be macgyver, aint no way you're steerin clear of this road jam
I'll beat you from when Niccateen until Nic is an old man
You're the wack type, Someone should've told you to act right
Now your rapbattles career is about to be shorter your half-life
Tyring to be the forums new king, fuck it I already got the job
You couldn't match my spits wit a dna kit and a cotton swab
bro you werent suppose to do a poll
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...open-for-votes
mod edited in for me thanks doing verse now im on my brake
.. Frontin to seem real but in the end your not faking the vets, Your life gets takin-in-text
When Nicc gladly Handles Mush Like Happy Bookies Takin His Bets..
..Sick From the Gate Niccs Been Diseased Since Birth, Truth is I Keyd This Verse,
Winnings A Arms Length Away For Him and Hes only Half there like Sleevless Shirts..
..Ya writtens get torn its the definition of a Ripped Both, structure is there but
you Skipped Truth, Hes Koed Cas Niccs Bars Hurt On Impact Like a Chipped Tooth..
..No Shot To Win Chump But You'll Keep On Fighting? Cool!, Cas Eventually Deaths
Reuniting Fools When Niccs Takes This White Out Like Stealing Writing Tools..
Explanations: Mush is expression in betting for someone who bets n is assumed to already lost n other is hes white..white to btw just wanted to throw a personal in there sry brake got delayed chose to close instead
Cancer survivor
Old man
Vs
Nothing
Mushashi your nameplays were solid. Wording could've been more crisp on a few likes or better for impact. I'd like to see more stuff from you. I see potential.
Nicateen your verse is all over the place, get a set-up line & then punch. If you want multis thats fine & dandy just use them to your advantage meaning set-up lines & punch. Your nonexistent set-ups read like horrible filler. Im not impressed that you can rhyme & no one else will be. Make the lines flow together & your punches will have more impact. It's reading choppy.. No real insults either it read like a swagger & flow open mic. Also explaining punches doesnt help let ppl look it up if they dont get it. Make the reader think their dumb for not knowing. Feel me?
Vote mushashi
Watch this pussy shivering and quiverin, actin like an antsy vagina
Then see me drop niccateen quicker than a pulmonary cancer survivor
Kind of predictable name-play but an effective "jab"
You can't be macgyver, aint no way you're steerin clear of this road jam
I'll beat you from when Niccateen until Nic is an old man
I like the punch, again generic but effective
You're the wack type, Someone should've told you to act right
Now your rapbattles career is about to be shorter your half-life
miss for me
Tyring to be the forums new king, fuck it I already got the job
You couldn't match my spits wit a dna kit and a cotton swab
cliché punch line. miss here.
vs
.. Frontin to seem real but in the end your not faking the vets, Your life gets takin-in-text
When Nicc gladly Handles Mush Like Happy Bookies Takin His Bets..
Not harsh
..Sick From the Gate Niccs Been Diseased Since Birth, Truth is I Keyd This Verse,
Winnings A Arms Length Away For Him and Hes only Half there like Sleevless Shirts..
I thought this was your best attempt
..Ya writtens get torn its the definition of a Ripped Both, structure is there but
you Skipped Truth, Hes Koed Cas Niccs Bars Hurt On Impact Like a Chipped Tooth..
Nah. not feeling this
..No Shot To Win Chump But You'll Keep On Fighting? Cool!, Cas Eventually Deaths
Reuniting Fools When Niccs Takes This White Out Like Stealing Writing Tools..
miss here
vote mush for better attempts/ harsher punch-lines
Mush- punches are there, I'd say work on utilizing your set-ups to work with your punch-lines.
Nicca- I saw some creative thought, just needed to stay focused on harsher punches and avoid filler- lines
Also, I just noticed both dropped 4 bars instead of the agreed upon 5. Unless I missed something..Originally Posted by DamienThorn
Watch this pussy shivering and quiverin, actin like an antsy vagina
Then see me drop niccateen quicker than a pulmonary cancer survivor
Was okay, wording hurt the punch though.
You can't be macgyver, aint no way you're steerin clear of this road jam
I'll beat you from when Niccateen until Nic is an old man
No link between setup/punch, but nice name flip.
You're the wack type, Someone should've told you to act right
Now your rapbattles career is about to be shorter your half-life
Miss for me. Didn't see the point of this.
Tyring to be the forums new king, fuck it I already got the job
You couldn't match my spits wit a dna kit and a cotton swab
Was okay, pretty played concept though. Stay away from dna lines.
vs
.. Frontin to seem real but in the end your not faking the vets, Your life gets takin-in-text
When Nicc gladly Handles Mush Like Happy Bookies Takin His Bets..
Okay nameplay/punch but don't through in multi's that arent needed and match your bars more- it fucked up the bar.
i.e
Ya not real U get taken in text going on fake wit these vets
So Once again mush gettin handled Like a Bookie Takin His Bets..
^^^
Creativity is important but drop stuff thats not needed.
..Sick From the Gate Niccs Been Diseased Since Birth, Truth is I Keyd This Verse,
Winnings A Arms Length Away For Him and Hes only Half there like Sleevless Shirts..
This was a miss, concept was there but again its not delivered right.
..Ya writtens get torn its the definition of a Ripped Both, structure is there but
you Skipped Truth, Hes Koed Cas Niccs Bars Hurt On Impact Like a Chipped Tooth..
..No Shot To Win Chump But You'll Keep On Fighting? Cool!, Cas Eventually Deaths
Reuniting Fools When Niccs Takes This White Out Like Stealing Writing Tools..
Wtf were these, too wrong to even critique
Mush you know what your doing, you just want to elevate a bit.
Nicc - Seriously take some time to understand the mechanics of a good battle verse i.e punchlines, personals, and being direct
Myvote mush..
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weak battle, no hate. mush had light hits n nicc's style seems str8 outta 2005. infact i wonder if this is the niccateen from back then. are u from philly. i remember him being from philly
i guess v/ mush
Mushashi: Pulmonary Cancer Survivor (I thought this was decent imo).
Vs
Niccateen: Nothing...
Overall: mushashi clearly had a lot better misses & his wording was much smoother... He also had one decent quote imo so he gets the vote clearly... Niccateen, try looking at some of the LLL battlers and see how they word their bars..
Vote: Mush
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Thanks for the votes. By way of explanation Nicotine has a short half-life, about 1-2 hours compared to about 67 days for Cannabis for example.
5-1 win for @Mushashi
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