They call me Lunar Tick. Every move and steps are movie scripts.
in that blue abyss was a movement. twitch. the mood was shift.
a lumbering hue exists in gloomy mist. truly sensing doom impending,
he moved against a huge crevice. woods and sticks, seperates this wolf from its hugest threat
That's looking good so far.
It's amazing how something so small instantly changes your whole world. Bro, I'm honestly glad for you.. you must be gettin proud af too on the small things.. like my boy just sat up the other day and I was like "NFL STAR RIGHT THERE, NFL SOON BABY, WHOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!" cheering him on haahahahha
Lol.....yeah but the baby mama isn't so fun at times.
The end of a Revelation.... But a Clever Word always illustrated.
So how do you deal with that, masturbate?
@Hypotheses congrats bud
Nope. Celibacy
@Jukon
Collab? Probably just twelve.
For OM feedback as a suggestion not required, but should use categories to help sense where some writers lack in or what needs to be improved therefore.
Flow:
Multiples:
Wordplay:
Theme:
Originality:
Imagery:
Nothing to major just the basis. Almost like critiquing a topical battle, but with help to improve. Just a suggestion. I might still use it though. Then finalize with your overall analysis.
The end of a Revelation.... But a Clever Word always illustrated.
Not a bad thought, Hypo. I have always done this in my word as it is without the clear differentiation between the topics.
Last edited by whoami; October 19th, 2015 at 01:33 PM