Hated by who I hate first...

[Angel Of Light]

I like this peice a lot it made me keep reading and dont stop till the end really good flow and image and felt like i was right there ending was great and wouldnt change it at all begging 9/10 middle 10/10 and ending 10/10 overall great peice of work and should be hof by far keep writing ur a very great writer

[The Vortex]

I guess the aggression always comes from your own faults,
Alone, false hope calls its home a quote from your own jaws...

nicely crafted bar, f'sho


I try the ignition to my engine of peace,
But at least give my mission a pen so I mention it, PLEASE!

this is a dope pop again, smooth meta type ish



And as of yet I've failed where I could have succeeded,
Deleted brain cells and added text that spells "I'm conceited."
Feed it or read flow that eats for an ego,
We know that I keep shit inside --- what's it mean, though?
Is evil just a choice - a Rolls Royce or a Bentley?
Empty space with a voice quakes with greed that's petty --- but tempts me

this bars was nicely strung together, flow was dynamic, expression was solid and meaningful

lost focus and wrote this so you'd notice the post scripts,
My hope is the motives are known when I show bliss...
I'm not owed this, life's a gift, why do we look at the gift horse?
Like lip sores are in his mouth, I'm out of love --- but is this worse?


YES the ending was dope as can be, multis and mettas had me hooked all the way home, flow was hectic, wording of mettas was well thought out, and gave the piece ill visual aspects and food for thought

shit is nice,

stay raising the game

pz

[Man of Steel Man]

this piece was cool...i got into it more so in the second verse and continued through to the end...it had a nice flow to it...kind of reminded me of when Em said "im not ready to leave....its to scary to die...id rather be carried inside the cemetary and be burried alive" that was the rhytm that i categorized your flow with. Your imagery was cool as well...used good emotion as well which helped this piece remain strong...solid read overall...cheers

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...in-356668.html

^^^hit this one and let me know what you think

[Engivale]

thanks 4 all the love and feed from all of you... New Year's weekend and Eve and Day are all really long ones for me at work and then the afterparties aren't helping me much either, here, basically I'm at home like five hours a day to try and sleep... Anyways, Tuesday night or wednesday i'll be getting to some pieces, guys, until then I'm just kind of being run into the ground, sorry.

[Morbid Dream]

You two guys are funny...

S'like ya'll see yourselves locked in this high school popularity contest, football team picking on nerds type of situation...

And the way you prop yourselves over and over again...with such emotion...with such zeal...

Reminds me of Superbad...towards the end...when they curled up on the floor and said "I love you" to each other...over and over again.

You two are like that.
You want the whole site to bow to you...to put you in Legends and treat you with the respect and grace you give to each other...

Why the need for such accolades?

Are you missing them in real life?

Anyway...

Nice verse...real tight flow...
Very respectable. A good read.
Nice venting.

Why can't shit like that be enough?

This debacle was hilarious...a few nerves struck each way. LOL. About that I only have one comment.

Born isnt feed supposed to be like 3 complete lines?...


Any way...Engivale...real nice piece. It didnt have any political bullshit or spiritual/anti-religious undertones. Even though I reckon you have me as some one your "Hated by who I hate first..." truth is I dont have any sentiment at all your way.

A promise I haven't kept is to be honest and have respect -
Not to cash a check I didn't earn and return to a past I've met...
And as of yet I've failed where I could have succeeded,
Deleted brain cells and added text that spells "I'm conceited."

Rhyme schemes like this really impress me.

Not to stretch praise into flattery...I think since unique style is an asset or valued talent, then you have something better than most of RB. Or perhaps your just a more skilled writer - with the same style [not my opinion]. REal good rhyme scheme and i was digging the multis.

Emotion was all there and although the imagery wasnt dazzling the content really held my attention throughout. Definateely a verse many can relate to [including me] so thats 10/10 there.

I lost focus and wrote this so you'd notice the post scripts,
My hope is the motives are known when I show bliss...
I'm not owed this, life's a gift, why do we look at the gift horse?
Like lip sores are in his mouth, I'm out of love --- but is this worse?

Check the syntax but other wise

RTF

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...me-356811.html